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It is believed my many that advertisements play a huge role in asking customers to buy while others believe that advertisements are a thing of past. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is believed my many that advertisements play a huge role in asking customers to buy while others believe that advertisements are a thing of past. Bw27V
Many individuals believe that advertisements often succeeds in motivating us to buy new products while others opine that they have became used to of it and it no longer lusts them. In this essay both of the views will be highlighted including my opinion. To begin with, it is oftely believed that advertisements pay a huge role in forcing us to buy newly launched products. As we pay huge attention to the banners that are posted on the hangings near our homes, many of us tend to get attracted with such things and often end up buying them. As per a survey done by a grocery store 38% of the children comes to there stores after watching the posters of there products. This way banners play a huge role in attracting one to spend on new things. On the other hand, there are other civilians too that argue that these are the things of past and no longer attract them. Due to the technological advancements, many apps put notifications for those users who are having a membership or accounts related to their apps. Henceforth, they spend lumpsome after watching notifications related to the new items and they longer are attracted to posters. A survey done by a shopping apps named Urbanic represents that 40% of its users buy items after getting a ping related to newly launched item. Technology is really playing a vital role in sponsoring new things that come in the market. To wind up, I would like to say that advertisements are still important for many as older residents of a nation still uses phones that just have a basic facility of making a phone call and receiving one. In my opinion advertisements are important as they fascinates many and are still important for the society of a particular country.
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individuals believe that
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advertisements
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often
succeeds in motivating us to
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buy
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new
products while others opine that they have became
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used
to of it and it no longer lusts them. In this essay both of the views will
be highlighted
including my opinion.

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begin
with, it is
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oftely
believed that
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advertisements
pay a huge role in forcing us to
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buy
newly
launched products. As we pay huge attention to the banners that
are posted
on the hangings near our homes,
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many
of us tend to
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get
attracted with such things and
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often
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end
up buying them. As per a survey done by a grocery store 38% of the children
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comes
to
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there
stores after watching the posters of
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there
products. This way banners play a huge role in attracting one to spend on
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new
things.

On the other hand
, there are other civilians
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too that
argue that these are the things of past and no longer attract them. Due to the technological advancements,
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many
apps put notifications for those users who are having a membership or accounts related to their apps. Henceforth, they spend
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lumpsome
after watching notifications related to the
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new
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items and
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they longer
are attracted
to posters. A survey done by a shopping apps named
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Urbanic
represents that 40% of its users
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
items after getting a ping related to
newly
launched item. Technology is
really
playing a vital role in sponsoring
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new
things that
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come
in the market.

To wind up, I would like to say that
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advertisements
are
still
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important
for
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many
as older residents of a nation
still
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uses
phones that
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just
have a basic facility of making a phone call and receiving one. In my opinion
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advertisements
are
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important
as they
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fascinates
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many
and are
still
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important
for the society of a particular country.

IELTS essay It is believed my many that advertisements play a huge role in asking customers to buy while others believe that advertisements are a thing of past.

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