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It is believed by some that, the higher authorities should not give the donations to art and culture exhibition however, other majority of people asserted that, it is more valuable for people if government support that sites. The essay will examine both the views in upcoming paragraph. On the one hand, it is a wastage of money if government spend on that art and culture places think by some. Firstly, there are other departments such as education and medical government should be funding more on that type of places because this place are basic necessity of every country. If those things are properly managed then government should Be little funding on that sites. For example, if a country is educated and free from diseases that is called happily country all over the world. On the other hand, it is more beneficial for the country as well as resident if government support and funding on culture and art museum because those places are the attraction of tourism if more that type of places

It is believed by some that, the higher authorities should not give the donations to art and culture exhibition however, other majority of people asserted that, it is more valuable for people if government support that sites. The essay will examine both the views in upcoming paragraph. On the one hand, it is a wastage of money if government spend on that art and culture places think by some. Firstly, there are other departments such as education and medical government should be funding more on that type of places because this place are basic necessity of every country. If those things are properly managed then government should Be little funding on that sites. For example, if a country is educated and free from diseases that is called happily country all over the world. On the other hand, it is more beneficial for the country as well as resident if government support and funding on culture and art museum because those places are the attraction of tourism if more that type of places 2JDA
It is believed by some that, the higher authorities should not give the donations to art and culture exhibition however, other majority of people asserted that, it is more valuable for people if government support that sites. The essay will examine both the views in upcoming paragraph. On the one hand, it is a wastage of money if government spend on that art and culture places think by some.  Firstly, there are other departments such as education and medical government should be funding more on that type of places because this place are basic necessity of every country. If those things are properly managed then government should Be little funding on that sites. For example, if a country is educated and free from diseases that is called happily country all over the world. On the other hand, it is more beneficial for the country as well as resident if government support and funding on culture and art museum because those places are the attraction of tourism if more that type of places are expanding its help to escalate the tourism ratio. For example in Japan government more develop that places by this 40% increase in tourism who came from other countries. Does it help to boost the economy of country and helps to give identity in the front of world when tourists are visiting the country In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that government should more funding on art and culture sides because nowadays every person far away from that places if government develop more places related to culture it is more valuable for resident
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support that sites. The essay will examine both the views in upcoming paragraph.

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spend on that
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museum
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are expanding its
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in Japan
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more develop that
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by this 40% increase in tourism who came from
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nowadays every person far away from that
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it is more valuable for
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IELTS essay It is believed by some that, the higher authorities should not give the donations to art and culture exhibition however, other majority of people asserted that, it is more valuable for people if government support that sites. The essay will examine both the views in upcoming paragraph. On the one hand, it is a wastage of money if government spend on that art and culture places think by some. Firstly, there are other departments such as education and medical government should be funding more on that type of places because this place are basic necessity of every country. If those things are properly managed then government should Be little funding on that sites. For example, if a country is educated and free from diseases that is called happily country all over the world. On the other hand, it is more beneficial for the country as well as resident if government support and funding on culture and art museum because those places are the attraction of tourism if more that type of places

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
265 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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