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It is argued that in the future it will be unnecessary for children to go to school as they can study at home via the Internet

It is argued that in the future it will be unnecessary for children to go to school as they can study at home via the Internet XGqEr
The internet has the profound impact on the way people interact and in education for children. Even those I strongly disagree that they could study remotely as it is definitely lack of providing social skills and facilities. Although the regular environment in school seems to be not attracted enough to children, but the absence of it will damage much to the quality of education. Because with those who thrive in the structured learning could be lack of valuable guidance, encouragement from professors and “college spirit” to succeed as these are crucial part of education. Along with this issue, discipline and engagement to the class also couldn’t maintain with the indirect contact when children is not self-direct and still having unhealthy learning habits. Therefore, e-learning has just been used partly for students in university who even feel hard to adapt. School facility and social environment also a vital part that distance learning couldn’t build up. Without the real interaction, pupil could feel isolated and not be able to have relationships which is heading for trouble, therefore, could learn how to solve them. This stepping stone is vital to reach the live long success for everyone and should be experienced as soon as they can. Moreover, education facility providing in school could help to improve hand-on practical experimentation and others which is unable study remotely. In conclusion, studying home via the internet is, in fact, not for children as it couldn’t provide an important roles for children. Thus, this method could partly be used with a small percentage to help children adapt to the new era of digital.
The internet has the profound impact on the way
people
interact and in
education
for
children
. Even those I
strongly
disagree that they could study
remotely
as it is definitely lack of providing social
skills
and facilities.

Although the regular environment in school seems to be not attracted
enough
to
children
,
but
the absence of it will damage much to the quality of
education
.
Because
with those who thrive in the structured learning could be lack of valuable guidance, encouragement from professors and “college spirit” to succeed as these are crucial part of
education
. Along with this issue, discipline and engagement to the
class
also
couldn’t maintain with the indirect contact when
children
is
not self-direct and
still
having unhealthy learning habits.
Therefore
, e-learning has
just
been
used
partly for students in university who even feel
hard
to adapt.

School facility and social environment
also
a vital part that distance learning couldn’t build up. Without the real interaction, pupil could feel isolated and not be able to have relationships which is heading for trouble,
therefore
, could learn how to solve them. This stepping stone is vital to reach the
live
long success for everyone and should
be experienced
as
soon
as they can.
Moreover
,
education
facility providing in school could
help
to
improve
hand-on practical experimentation
and others
which is unable study
remotely
.

In conclusion
, studying home via the internet is, in fact, not for
children
as it couldn’t provide an
important
roles
for
children
.
Thus
, this method could partly be
used
with a
small
percentage to
help
children
adapt to the new era of digital.
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IELTS essay It is argued that in the future it will be unnecessary for children to go to school as they can study at home via the Internet

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  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.0
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