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Describe an event that you looked forward to which turned out to be disappointing, Explain why you were excited about it and why it didn't live up to your expectations.

Describe an event that you looked forward to which turned out to be disappointing, Explain why you were excited about it and why it didn't live up to your expectations. LrbwK
As I gradually stood up, I could hear the huge round of applause by the audience. People were chanting my name, “Jayanth. . Jayanth”. This was a moment that I lived for and thoroughly enjoyed the stardom. I swiftly turned ninety degrees left and briskly started walking when I suddenly heard a loud thud. Unwarranted pain slowly inched over me. It felt as if I had succumbed to the ground. I opened my eyes and alas, realised that this was just a dream. A dream, which I hoped will come true. I had my first solo guitar performance coming up in less than a week. I had practiced months just to perform a two minute piece. I made sure I mastered my timing, tempo, chords and transition between chords. Intense practice sessions with my instructor and countless number of times playing it in front of my parents, I was working as hard as I could. This was not only a performance, it was also my examination for me to reach the next grade and I had to ace it. All my friends and family were attending this event which also had other performances like the piano and the ukulele. I was really looking forward to playing in the event and exhibiting my skills. As the day was approaching, my enthusiasm grew exponentially. In school, I chuntered on about my upcoming performance and how much I had endeavoured for it like a broken recorder. Finally, the day arrived. I was eagerly waiting in the backstage, thinking to myself on who would have come to support me. Just as how zest I was feeling, I had butterflies in my stomach, lest I commit a mistake. The thought of it just made my hands shiver and legs flutter about. Perspiration trickled down my forehead. I decided to divert away from these thoughts and started practicing for the last time. My name was about to be called. Out of the blue, my left index finger, one of the relatively more important fingers to play the chords was scratched by the guitar strings and blood started oozing out. Fear creeped over me. This was the event I was so excited for and it seemed that it was the beginning of the end. Needless to say, my performance was substandard and I blundered frequently. The eagle-eyed judges could pick even the slightest of mistakes made and now I was just making their job easier for them. I had to retake the examination in the next performance and had dampened the spirits of my friends and family. I promised to myself that next time, I would not be too particular to over exert myself but rather keep a balance between practising the guitar and my other activities. This incident is etched in my mind and I would make sure to never repeat this again.
As I
gradually
stood up, I could hear the huge round of applause by the audience.
People
were chanting my name, “
Jayanth
.
.
Jayanth
”. This was a moment that I
lived
for and
thoroughly
enjoyed the stardom. I
swiftly
turned ninety degrees
left
and
briskly
started
walking when I
suddenly
heard a loud thud. Unwarranted pain
slowly
inched over me. It felt as if I had succumbed to the ground.

I opened my eyes and alas,
realised
that this was
just
a dream. A dream, which I hoped will
come
true. I had my
first
solo guitar
performance
coming up in less than a week. I had practiced months
just
to perform a
two minute
piece.
I
made sure I mastered my timing, tempo, chords and transition between chords. Intense practice sessions with my instructor and countless number of times playing it in front of my parents, I was working as
hard
as I could. This was not
only
a
performance
, it was
also
my examination for me to reach the
next
grade and I had to ace it.

All my friends and family were attending this
event
which
also
had other
performances
like the piano and the ukulele. I was
really
looking forward to playing in the
event
and exhibiting my
skills
. As the day was approaching, my enthusiasm grew
exponentially
. In school, I chuntered on about my upcoming
performance
and how much I had
endeavoured
for it like a broken recorder.

Finally
, the day arrived. I was
eagerly
waiting in the backstage, thinking to myself on who would have
come
to support me.
Just
as how zest I was feeling, I had butterflies in my stomach, lest I commit a mistake. The
thought
of it
just
made my hands shiver and legs flutter about. Perspiration trickled down my forehead. I decided to divert away from these thoughts and
started
practicing for the last time. My name was about to
be called
. Out of the blue, my
left
index finger, one of the
relatively
more
important
fingers to play the chords
was scratched
by the guitar strings and blood
started
oozing out. Fear creeped over me. This was the
event
I was
so
excited for and it seemed that it was the beginning of the
end
.

Needless to say, my
performance
was substandard and I blundered
frequently
. The eagle-eyed judges could pick even the slightest of mistakes made and
now
I was
just
making their job easier for them. I had to retake the examination in the
next
performance
and had dampened the spirits of my friends and family. I promised to myself that
next
time, I would not be too particular to over exert myself
but
rather
keep
a balance between
practising
the guitar and my other activities. This incident
is etched
in my mind and I would
make
sure to never repeat this again.
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IELTS essay Describe an event that you looked forward to which turned out to be disappointing, Explain why you were excited about it and why it didn't live up to your expectations.

Essay
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5 paragraphs
477 words
5.5
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