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It is argued by some individuals that nowadays, students put much attention on one particular subject rather than others, but few people believe that education institutions should encourage students to study a c Variety of subjects.

It is argued by some individuals that nowadays, students put much attention on one particular subject rather than others, but few people believe that education institutions should encourage students to study a c Variety of subjects. Although one particular subject has beneficial, but l also believe that other important subjects play significant role in students life. On the one hand, there are myriad of reasons as to why students prefer to enrolled in one particular subject. first and foremost one is that, under the influence of parents. To explain, a number of students choose one subjects which there parents put pressure on them as they wants to see their children become a successful person in life. For example, some parents wanted to become their children a doctor, a engineer and a businessman so that's why without knowing the interest of their ward's they enrolled them in one particular subject. The another is, passion and interest is also key ingredients because Due to interest they make decisions to choose one subject. One the other hand, in my view point other range of subjects are also important in our life. howerver, we all know that one particular subject require a strive work and practice, in which students devote with self but along with get bored so additional subject's such as, music, games, art, and many more give s a chance to ease up their stree and help to get rid all worries and tension. In addition to it, when students enrolled in several different subjects, it will help them because it opens the door of number of lucrative jobs and students can get it to lifted up their economical conditions. for example along with study when they learn music, it will help them to play act as a playback singer and also help to enroll in movies. In conclusion, while the prone of one subject among students are important, but l also believe that other several subjects play integral role in every persons life.
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Variety of
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has beneficial,
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life.

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students
prefer to enrolled in one
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particular
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subject
.
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first
and foremost one is that, under the influence of parents. To
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, a number of
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choose one
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subjects
which there parents put pressure on them as they
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to
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see
their children become a successful person in life.
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,
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parents wanted to become their children a doctor,
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engineer and a businessman
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that's why without knowing the interest of their ward's they enrolled them in one
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particular
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. The another is, passion and interest is
also
key ingredients
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because
Due to interest they
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make
decisions to choose one subject.

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hand, in my view point
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other
range of
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also
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in our life.
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howerver
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require
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work and practice, in which
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devote with self
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bored
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additional subject's such as, music, games, art, and
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more give s a chance to
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enrolled in several
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, it will
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it opens the door of number of lucrative jobs and
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their
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conditions.
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for
example along with study when they learn music, it will
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help
them to play act as a playback singer and
also
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help
to enroll in movies.

In conclusion
, while
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one
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,
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several
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play integral role in every
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persons
life.
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IELTS essay It is argued by some individuals that nowadays, students put much attention on one particular subject rather than others, but few people believe that education institutions should encourage students to study a c Variety of subjects.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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