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It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent. Discuss both views. v.3

It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent. v. 3
The rank of crimes is increasing at an alarming rate worldwide. It is believed, that the capital punishment is a good way to prevent these serious crimes. However, others think that year long judgement is way better. This essay will discuss the above mentioned views in further detail. On one side, individuals opine that the execution is the best way to prevent the barbaric crimes. Firstly, the offence committed, is too severe which cannot be tolerated in the society and hence, there should be some repercussions for that. Secondly, many criminals might think twice before committing any offence, which will lead to drop in the crimes in the community. For example, a survey report submitted by an agency, stated in Saudi Arabia there was about 85% of the decline in transgression after implementing strong stringent laws. On the other hand, people animadvert that giving long life sentences is a better deterrent to tackle this issue. In other words, the punishment should be given based on the crime, because there are some illegal acts which are more severe and some which are less severe. In addition, the culprit feels guilty of their misdeed, when they are spending their time in the prison. To illustrate, a survey report submitted by an integral factor in India, stated that about 65% of the wrongdoers feel bad during the tenure of their life sentence in jail. To conclude, the rate of crimes is exceeding at an alarming rate worldwide. This essay discussed why death sentence is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes has its benefits and why giving life long sentence is ultimately superior.
The rank of
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crimes
is increasing at an alarming rate worldwide. It
is believed
, that the capital punishment is a
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good
way to
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prevent
these serious
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crimes
.
However
, others
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think
that year long judgement is way better. This essay will discuss the above mentioned views in
further
detail.

On one side, individuals opine that the execution is the best way to
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prevent
the barbaric
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crimes
.
Firstly
, the
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offence
committed, is too severe which cannot
be tolerated
in the society and
hence
, there should be
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some
repercussions for that.
Secondly
,
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many
criminals might
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think
twice
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before
committing any
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offence
, which will lead to drop in the
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crimes
in the community.
For example
, a survey report submitted by an agency, stated in Saudi Arabia there was about 85% of the decline in transgression after implementing strong stringent laws.

On the other hand
,
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people
animadvert that giving long life
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sentences
is a better deterrent to tackle this issue.
In other words
, the punishment should be
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given
based on the
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crime
,
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because
there are
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some
illegal acts which are more severe and
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some
which are less severe.
In addition
, the culprit feels guilty of their misdeed, when they are spending their time in the prison. To illustrate, a survey report submitted by an integral factor in India, stated that about 65% of the wrongdoers feel
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bad
during the tenure of their life
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sentence
in jail.

To conclude
, the rate of
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crimes
is exceeding at an alarming rate worldwide. This essay discussed why death
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sentence
is a
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good
deterrent to
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prevent
heinous
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crimes
has its benefits and why giving life long
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sentence
is
ultimately
superior.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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