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It has been said that society is to blame for increasing youth crime . What is causing this trend ? Who should be responsible for dealing with it?

It has been said that society is to blame for increasing youth crime. What is causing this trend? Who should be responsible for dealing with it? p55N3

Regarding the sentence below, the society has a part of the blame but the majority of blame which are responsible for include the family education and educational system provide by community. First of all saying, the most crimes increasing nowadays are caused by the lack of education fallowing by the bunches of adolescents where majority of people are involves in their daily activities. For example: family play an important role in the education of an youth, while the educational system request a strong support in the adolescent growth. Additionally, the sentence of a youth crime can be raised as a concerned to the authorities which involved the police enforcement. The responsibility of a crime executed by an youth should be an concern for the family. For example: if the adolescent arrived home anxious and the family raised his concern, they will be the first witness of the incident. As an result, the worriments should be mention afterwords to the police force and from that point the authorities take actions. To conclude, I believe the society has half of the quilt, whereas the other half is represented by the band which youths are involved in.

Regarding the sentence below, the society has a part of the blame This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the majority of blame which are responsible for include the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withclantribegrouppeoplehousehousehold
family
 education and educational system provide by community.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
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people
 are involves in their daily activities. For example
: You use this word too often, consider replacing it withclantribegrouppeoplehousehousehold
family
 play an This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 role in the education of Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'a
an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withminorityteens
youth
, while the educational system request a strong support in the adolescent growth. Additionally
, the sentence of a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withminorityteens
youth
 crime can be raised
 as a concerned to the authorities which involved the police enforcement.

The responsibility of a crime executed by Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'a
an
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youth
 should be Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'a
an
 concern for the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withclantribegrouppeoplehousehousehold
family
. For example
: if the adolescent arrived home anxious and the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withclantribegrouppeoplehousehousehold
family
 raised his concern, they will be the first
 witness of the incident.  As Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'a
an
 result, the Possible spelling mistake found.worriment
worriments
 should be mention afterwords to the police force and from that point the authorities take actions.

To conclude
, I believe the society has half of the quilt, whereas the other half is represented
 by the band which youths are involved
 in. 