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It has been said that reading for pleasure is better in developing imagination and language skills than watching TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

It has been said that reading for pleasure is better in developing imagination and language skills than watching TV. v. 1
Nowadays, with the substantial development of technology, people tend to find another way to broaden their horizon rather than originally read books, they prefer to watch television instead because it is more convenient and approachable. However, I still stand the view that reading can help people become more imaginative and enrich their language skills for many reasons. First of all, reading is beneficial not just in terms of developing our imagination, but also let our creativity bloom. While reading, people are allowed to go with the flow of the story, put themselves in the character’s shoes and they have a picture in their heads of what is going to happen next. Trying to visualize how the character looks is also a way to stimulate their imagination, as a fact that each person has their own expectation, their character is also different. For example, when people have to think about a charming prince, a part believes that he wears a royal costume, and sits on his gold throne, the other thinks of a men with blonde hair and blue eyes is riding his white horse. It depends on their culture or basically, the fairy tales that they often hear about. Reading gives them an opportunity to imagine bases on the script, while watching creates a specific appearance and they have to accept it without thinking more. Another reason is reading help sharpen the language skills. People can enrich their vocabulary and learn a new sentence structure effortlessly. Furthermore, it helps them to remember longer because while reading, people take time to pore over what they do not understand. While I agree that watching TV can also help you with communication, but reading still give more rewards in the long run. In conclusion, I believe that reading is way more efficient to increase your creativity as well as improve your language skills.
Nowadays, with the substantial development of technology,
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people
tend to find another way to broaden their horizon
rather
than
originally
read books, they prefer to
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watch
television
instead
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because
it is more convenient and approachable.
However
, I
still
stand the view that
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reading
can
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help
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people
become more imaginative and enrich their language
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skills
for
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many
reasons.

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First of all
,
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reading
is beneficial not
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just
in terms of developing our imagination,
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but
also
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let
our creativity bloom. While
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reading
,
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people
are
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allowed
to
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go with
the flow of the story, put themselves in the character’s
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shoes and
they have a picture in their heads of what is going to happen
next
. Trying to visualize how the character looks is
also
a way to stimulate their imagination, as a fact that each person has their
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own
expectation, their character is
also
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different
.
For example
, when
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people
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have to
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think
about a charming prince, a part believes that he wears a royal costume, and sits on his gold throne, the other
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thinks
of a
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men
with blonde hair and blue eyes is riding his white horse. It depends on their culture or
basically
, the fairy tales that they
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often
hear about.
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Reading
gives them an opportunity to imagine bases on the script, while watching creates a specific
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appearance and
they
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have to
accept it without thinking more.

Another reason is
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reading
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help
sharpen the language
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skills
.
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People
can enrich their vocabulary and learn a new sentence structure
effortlessly
.
Furthermore
, it
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helps
them to remember longer
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because
while
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reading
,
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people
take time to pore over what they do not understand. While I
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agree
that watching TV can
also
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help
you with communication,
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but
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reading
still
give more rewards in the long run.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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reading
is way more efficient to increase your creativity
as well
as
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improve
your language
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skills
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay It has been said that reading for pleasure is better in developing imagination and language skills than watching TV. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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