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Recently I read an article written by Honor Whiteman on the magazine Medical News Today. It was about the benefits and effects of music to our health. American musician Billy Joel says that. music in itself is healing. It’s an explosive expression of humanity. It’s something we are all touched by. No matter what culture we’re from, everyone loves music. Most of us would wholeheartedly agree with this statement, and it is this universal bond with music that has led researchers across the globe to investigate its therapeutic potential. “, ” said Barbara Else senior advisor of policy and research at the American Music Therapy Association told Medical News Today believes that we have a such a deep connection to music because it is ‘hardwired’ in our brains and bodies. We can all think of at least one song that, when we hear it, triggers an emotional response. It might be a song that accompanied the first dance at your wedding, for example, or a song that reminds you of a difficult break-up or the loss of a loved one. It is written that the elements of music – rhythm, melody, etc. – are echoed in our physiology, functioning and being. Given the deep connection we have with music, it is perhaps unsurprising that numerous studies have shown it can benefit our mental health. A 2011 study by researchers from McGill University in Canada found that listening to music increases the amount of dopamine produced in the brain – a mood-enhancing chemical, making it a feasible treatment for depression. It is stated that, earlier this year, MNT reported on a study published in The Lancet Psychiatry that suggested listening to hip-hop music – particularly that from Kendrick Lamar – may help individuals to understand mental health disorders. But increasingly, researchers are finding that the health benefits of music may go beyond mental health, and as a result, some health experts are calling for music therapy to be more widely incorporated into health care settings. Overall, in the article it is restated that music can be used to improve – or even replace – current treatment strategies.
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. American musician Billy Joel says that.
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music
in itself is healing. It’s an explosive expression of humanity. It’s something we are all touched by. No matter what culture we’re from, everyone
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loves
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music
. Most of us would
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agree
with this statement, and it is this universal bond with
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that has led researchers across the globe to investigate its therapeutic potential. “,
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said Barbara Else senior advisor of policy and research at the American
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Therapy Association
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because
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for example
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rhythm, melody, etc.
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are echoed
in our physiology, functioning and being.
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Given
the deep connection we have with
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music
, it is perhaps unsurprising that numerous studies have shown it can benefit our mental
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health
. A 2011 study by researchers from McGill University in Canada found that listening to
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music
increases the amount of dopamine produced in the brain
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–
a mood-enhancing chemical, making it a feasible treatment for depression. It
is stated
that, earlier this year, MNT reported on a study published in The Lancet Psychiatry that suggested listening to hip-hop
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music
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particularly
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help
individuals to understand mental
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disorders.
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increasingly
, researchers are finding that the
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benefits of
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may go beyond mental
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, and
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,
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some
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experts are calling for
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music
therapy to be more
widely
incorporated into
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health
care settings.

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, in the article it
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current
treatment strategies.
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IELTS essay It can benefit health for many reasons

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
356 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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