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Is toursim banned in our country or not

Is toursim banned in our country or not pJ1Rm
This is currently contentious argument whether should be tourism banned or advertise for coming the foreign candidate toour country. In my opinion the decision of close the door for the visitors is not a right decision. Firstly, a numerous people have a confidence in to aware the government for the benefits of tourism. A lot of people earn their livelihood and run their houses. The rate of of flights will increases. Furthermore, wonderful and amazing places have in our motherland. On the other hand, some people think that shut down the shutters of tourism for arrivals from other countries. The reason is that citizen are attracted by their culture. In this way, we will lost our traditions and culture In conclusion, it is not appropriate to close the door for the visitors. Government schedule a plan for tourism. It is because Our country will grow and a huge amount comes to our banks
This is
currently
contentious argument whether should be
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tourism
banned or advertise for coming the foreign candidate
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toour
country. In my opinion the decision of close the door for the visitors is not a right decision.
Firstly
, a numerous
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people
have a confidence in to aware the
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government
for the benefits of
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tourism
.
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A lot of
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people
earn their livelihood and run their
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houses
. The rate
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of of
flights will increases.
Furthermore
, wonderful and amazing places have in our motherland.
On the other hand
,
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some
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people
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think
that shut down the shutters of
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tourism
for arrivals from other countries. The reason is that citizen
are attracted
by their culture. In this way, we will
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lost
our traditions and culture
In conclusion
, it is not appropriate to close the door for the visitors.
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Government
schedule a plan for
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tourism
. It is
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because
Our country will grow and a huge amount
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comes
to our
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banks
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IELTS essay Is toursim banned in our country or not

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
152 words
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