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Is the mental strength important for success in sports or is it more important to have strong and fit people in sports. Discuss both views and give opinion. v.3

Is the mental strength important for success in sports or is it more important to have strong and fit people in sports. v. 3
In the world of competitive sports, coaches and sports specialists have been attempting to identify all defining factors for an athlete to succeed in this field. While many people believe that physical strength is the primary element of winning in sports, others emphasize the willpower. Both of the schools of thought hold valid arguments, which will be discussed in this essay. Personally, I think these strengths should equally be put into account to enhance one's achievement in sports. First and foremost, there is a rule of thumb that physiques and fitness is the primary factor in selecting and coaching athletes. For example, all the most successful NBA players show great physical dominance and consider it as their major advantage to defeat other players in the league. In addition, without physical strength, the strategies would not be able to be executed nicely and precisely. As a result, a team would lose the game owing to the lack of this necessary factor. However, it is proven that psychological factors associated with physical performance. The history of the Olympic Games witnessed many sportsmen coming so close to the glory yet mentally collapsed. Besides, because sports are extremely competitive, competitors are required to practice diligently daily. In most cases, athletes are unlikely to fully reach their potential with the absence of will power, which enables them to carry out through the hard-working practices. In conclusion, both physical and mental strength plays essential parts in competitive sports. In my opinion, to be successful in this field, athletes and coaches need to figure out how to integrate these two winning defining factors.
In the world of competitive
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sports
, coaches and
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sports
specialists have been attempting to identify all defining
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factors
for an
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athlete
to succeed in this field. While
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many
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people
believe that
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physical
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strength
is the primary element of winning in
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sports
, others emphasize the willpower. Both of the schools of
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thought
hold valid arguments, which will
be discussed
in this essay.
Personally
, I
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think
these
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strengths
should
equally
be put
into account to enhance one's achievement in sports.

First
and foremost, there is a
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rule
of thumb that physiques and fitness is the primary
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factor
in selecting and coaching
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athletes
.
For example
, all the most successful NBA players
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show
great
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physical
dominance and consider it as their major advantage to defeat other players in the league.
In addition
, without
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physical
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strength
, the strategies would not be able to
be executed
nicely
and
precisely
.
As a result
, a team would lose the game owing to the lack of this necessary factor.

However
, it
is proven
that psychological
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factors
associated with
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physical
performance. The history of the Olympic Games witnessed
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many
sportsmen coming
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so
close to the glory
yet
mentally collapsed.
Besides
,
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because
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sports
are
extremely
competitive, competitors
are required
to practice
diligently
daily.
In most cases
,
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athletes
are unlikely to
fully
reach their potential with the absence of will power, which enables them to carry out through the
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hard
-working practices.

In conclusion
, both
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physical
and mental
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strength
plays essential parts in competitive
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sports
.
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In
my opinion, to be successful in this field,
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athletes
and coaches need to figure out how to integrate these two winning defining
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factors
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Is the mental strength important for success in sports or is it more important to have strong and fit people in sports. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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