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Is it possible to raise children by censoring certain things?

Is it possible to raise children by censoring certain things? 06y13

Is it possible to raise children by censoring certain things? Some people do this to raise their children, These people think that this censorship is good and useful for them. However, I do not agree with these people, because censorship causes weakness in children. This causes the child to not understand some of the issues. In conclusion, censorship creates many problems for children in the future.

Is it possible to raise children by censoring certain things?

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 do this to raise their children,

These This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 that this censorship is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 and useful for them.

However
, I do not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 with these This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 censorship causes weakness in children.

This causes the child to not understand If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?some
some of the
 issues.

In conclusion
, censorship creates This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 problems for children in the future. 