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Is it important to spend more funding on art by government do you agree or disagree

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Indeed, it is undoubtedly true that art plays a crucial role in human's life. It also open the door of success. However, most of the individuals argue that government should spend money on art. Well, I totally agree with the statement and I would discuss in my forthcoming paragraphs why government should encourage art by finding. To embark with, art is an activity in which people take interest by heart. There are many reasons of this that why government must be expend money on craft. The first and the formost cause is, it encourages persons to pursue their skills which they have. By continuing these activities are included the chances of success more, along with they can become popular in all over the world. They can increase their reputation not only in their society but also in the whole world. In addition, by encouraging art or craft activity is also enhanced the job opportunities. In other word, by funding more on this type of activity Would be reduced the growth of unemployment that would be improved individual's per capita income which can give a big contribution to strengthen the nation's economy. It can put an effective impact on people 's lifestyle. For instance, in the world, the majority of countries have spend their 20% wealth from their complete salary expend on art, which was revealed by WHO on its previous year's report. Eventually, it can be observed that government must have spend their money on art which will encourage People and also include the job opportunities for the civic of that particular nation.
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, it is
undoubtedly
true that
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art
plays a crucial role in human's life. It
also
open the door of success.
However
, most of the individuals argue that
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government
should spend money on
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art
. Well, I
totally
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agree
with the statement and I would discuss in my forthcoming paragraphs why
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government
should encourage
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art
by finding.

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art
is an
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activity
in which
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people
take
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interest by
heart. There are
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many
reasons of this that why
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government
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must
be
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expend
money on craft. The
first
and the
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formost
cause is, it encourages persons to pursue their
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skills
which they have. By continuing these
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activities
are included
the chances of success more, along with they can become popular in all over the world. They can increase their reputation not
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only
in their society
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but
also
in the whole world.

In addition
, by encouraging
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art
or craft
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activity
is
also
enhanced the job opportunities. In other word, by funding more on this type of
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activity
Would be
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reduced
the growth of unemployment that would be
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improved
individual's per capita income which can give a
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big
contribution to strengthen the nation's economy. It can put an effective impact on
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people
's lifestyle.
For instance
, in the world, the majority of countries have
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spend
their 20% wealth from their complete salary expend on
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art
, which
was revealed
by WHO on its previous year's report.

Eventually
, it can
be observed
that
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government
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must
have
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spend
their money on
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art
which will encourage
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People
and
also
include the job opportunities for the civic of that particular nation.
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IELTS essay Is it important to spend more funding on art by government

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.0
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