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Is it better to judge any person with first look or long term? Relation ship is required to know that person. Agree or disagree? v.1

Is it better to judge any person with first look or long term? Relation ship is required to know that person. Agree or disagree? v. 1
The prime modes of transportation around the world are either roadways or railways. Some people argue that government should cut off the budget on paving roads and invest more in building and maintaining railway system. I totally agree with the notion because of the two prime reasons. Firstly, transportation through train provides extended reach to small towns and villages and secondly, it is a faster alternative. Trains have proved to be the only efficient transport mean for people living in the suburbs of the country, primarily in the developing countries. The government’s limited budget does not allow it to build and maintain roads throughout the state, which is the reason that we only see narrow unpaved roads in the rural areas. Hence, people from countryside prefer to use trains to move from one place to another. To illustrate, in Pakistan more than half of the population from small towns and cities prefer to travel by train to avoid the tiring travel by road. Additionally, this rail network also allows them to move their agricultural produce to urban areas in a cheap and convenient manner. Moreover, travel through train is always faster than any vehicle on the road. Traffic congestion due to the increasing number of cars on roadways is one of the prime reasons of extended travel time. Trains bypass this hurdle through independent rail tracks, saving people’s time and effort. As, for instance, Government of Pakistan has introduced the metro train system in one of the busiest city of the country, Lahore. The prime purpose of executing the plan is to overcome the issue of heavy traffic on roads by providing an efficient railway network around the city. In conclusion, it is an undeniable fact that roadways are one of the primary means of travel, but state authorities should allocate more budget to the other best alternative, railways. Travel through trains besides being the faster substitute is also the only effective mode of transport for many people of the country, where the road network is almost non-existent.
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modes of transportation around the world are either roadways or
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railways
.
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Some
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people
argue that
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government
should
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cut
off the budget on paving
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roads
and invest more in building and maintaining
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railway
system. I
totally
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agree
with the notion
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because
of the two
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prime
reasons.
Firstly
, transportation
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through
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train
provides extended reach to
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small
towns and villages and
secondly
, it is a faster alternative.

Trains have proved to be the
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only
efficient transport mean for
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people
living in the suburbs of the
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country
,
primarily
in the developing
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countries
. The
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government
’s limited budget does not
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allow
it to build and maintain
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roads
throughout the state, which is the reason that we
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only
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see
narrow unpaved
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roads
in the rural areas.
Hence
,
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people
from countryside prefer to
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use
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trains
to
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move
from one place to another. To illustrate, in Pakistan more than half of the population from
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small
towns and cities prefer to
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travel
by
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train
to avoid the tiring
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travel
by
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road
.
Additionally
, this rail network
also
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allows
them to
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move
their agricultural produce to urban areas in a
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cheap
and convenient manner.

Moreover
,
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travel
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through
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train
is always faster than any vehicle on the
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road
. Traffic congestion due to the increasing number of cars on roadways is one of the
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prime
reasons of extended
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travel
time.
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Trains
bypass this hurdle
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through
independent rail
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tracks
, saving
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people’s
time and effort. As,
for instance
,
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Government
of Pakistan has introduced the metro
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train
system in one of the busiest city of the
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country
, Lahore. The
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prime
purpose of executing the plan is to overcome the issue of heavy traffic on
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roads
by providing an efficient
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railway
network around the city.

In conclusion
, it is an undeniable fact that roadways are one of the primary means of
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travel
,
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but
state authorities should allocate more budget to the other best alternative,
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railways
.
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Travel
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through
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trains
besides
being the faster substitute is
also
the
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only
effective mode of transport for
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many
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people
of the
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country
, where the
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road
network is almost non-existent.
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IELTS essay Is it better to judge any person with first look or long term? Relation ship is required to know that person. Agree or disagree? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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