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INTRODUCTION: I will explain my point of view in the following paragraphs and give some supporting reasons.In the present age some human think that kids should not observe TV while others think about or over that it useful them to upgrade their understanding.

INTRODUCTION: I will explain my point of view in the following paragraphs and give some supporting reasons. In the present age some human think that kids should not observe TV while others think about or over that it useful them to upgrade their understanding. Xo2nA
MAINBODY1: On the one hand children should watch TV because there are so many lessons and programs available today to increase children's knowladge. It's good for our kids to spend time with. It is very nice. Our children play a veriety of games on these shows and also watch cartoons on TV. It is through these shows that children can change for the better. For example, during the quarantine in our country, classes were held on TV, and children tought through them. MAINBODY2: On the other hand it is also true that children do not watch TV. TV to steal a lot of time. In addition a very severe effect on the human eyes. Nowadays there are a lot of nonsensical advertisement, and children's consciousnessis changing through these advertisements. A lot of our work and lessons are left behind by watching TV. TV definitely spoils children's minds. I think it would be better it they spent more time reading books. CONCLUSIONS: In general, whether you watch TV or not depends on the person. Everything has a norm, so everything should be in moderation.
MAINBODY1: On the one hand
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children
should
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TV
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because
there are
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so
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many
lessons and programs available
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today
to increase children's
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knowladge
. It's
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good
for our kids to spend time with. It is
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very
nice. Our
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children
play a
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veriety
of games on these
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shows
and
also
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watch
cartoons on TV. It is through these
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shows
that
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children
can
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change
for the better.
For example
, during the quarantine in our country, classes
were held
on TV, and
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children
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tought
through them.

MAINBODY2:
On the other hand
it is
also
true that
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children
do not
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watch
TV. TV to steal
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a lot of
time. In
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addition
a
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very
severe effect on the human eyes. Nowadays there are
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a lot of
nonsensical advertisement, and children's
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consciousnessis
changing through these advertisements.
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A lot of
our work and lessons are
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left
behind by watching TV. TV definitely spoils children's minds. I
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think
it would be better
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it
they spent more time reading books.

CONCLUSIONS:
In general
, whether you
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watch
TV or not depends on the person. Everything has a norm,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
everything should be in moderation.
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IELTS essay INTRODUCTION: I will explain my point of view in the following paragraphs and give some supporting reasons. In the present age some human think that kids should not observe TV while others think about or over that it useful them to upgrade their understanding.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
183 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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