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Internet Safety all about Internet

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The internet today is a great source of information. It is also known as the super information highway because it is the number one source that people of all ages turn to. The internet is especially a good source of communication between family across the country or even over seas. There are a whole lot of good sides to the internet, but what I come here to talk about is the dangers of the internet and what you can do to ensure the safety of you and your family. As technology improves, more and more people begin to play with computers, exploring the possibilities. As the people become more and more curious to what the limits are with computers, they begin to break those rules and steal information from other computers on the internet. There are many things that a computer hacker can get from your computer, and the same amount of answers to avoid these situations. Some of these hackers can get personal information off of your computer such as phone numbers, full names, credit card numbers, home addresses, personal letters, and much, much more. To avoid this many things can be done. First, you can store all the personal information, not wanted to be accessed by unknown eyes, on a separate floppy disk or other storage object you might have. You can also buy a firewall from your local computer store to allow you to choose who does and does not access your computer. Although, your personal information should be concealed from the internet, it is not the most dangerous thing out there. Young children should be monitored at all times when accessing the internet. AOL is a good internet service to have with young children. AOL offers many parent control options to ensure that your child does not view items on the internet less than appropriate for them. AOL offers four different access privileges for every different age group. The four ages groups are kids, young teens, mature
The internet
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today
is a great source of
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information
. It is
also
known as the super
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information
highway
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because
it is the number one source that
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people
of all ages turn to. The internet is
especially
a
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good
source of communication between family across the country or even
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over seas
. There are a
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whole lot
of
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good
sides to the internet,
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but
what I
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come
here to talk about is the
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dangers
of the internet and what you can do to ensure the safety of you and your family.

As technology
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improves
, more and more
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people
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begin
to play with computers, exploring the possibilities. As the
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people
become more and more curious to what the limits are with computers, they
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begin
to break those
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rules
and steal
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information
from other computers on the internet. There are
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many
things that a computer hacker can
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get
from your computer, and the same amount of answers to avoid these situations.
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Some
of these hackers can
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get
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personal
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information
off of your computer such as phone numbers, full names, credit card numbers, home addresses,
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personal
letters, and much, much more. To avoid this
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many
things can
be done
.
First
, you can store all the
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personal
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information
, not wanted to
be accessed
by unknown eyes, on a separate floppy disk or other storage object you might have. You can
also
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buy
a firewall from your local computer store to
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allow
you to choose who does and does not access your computer.

Although, your
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personal
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information
should
be concealed
from the internet, it is not the most
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dangerous
thing out there. Young children should
be monitored
at all times when accessing the internet. AOL is a
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good
internet service to have with young children. AOL offers
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many
parent control options to ensure that your child does not view items on the internet less than appropriate for them.
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AOL
offers four
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different
access privileges for every
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different
age group. The four ages groups are kids, young teens,
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mature

IELTS essay Internet Safety all about Internet

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
330 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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