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Internet crime is increasing rapidly as growing numbers of people purchase goods over the internet. What can be done to tackle this problem?

Internet facility is being used by every adults to purchase goods through online market, lots of choices can be found and it is convenient rather going to market physically for shopping. Online shopping is easy for all saves time of customer. Reviews are also available which will help buyers to check about goods which they tend to buy. E-commerce is in hype now, all goods manufacturer are either selling through own online site or are giving to agent to sell through there app or web site. By drastically increasing in web shopping fake gods are also being sold by e-commerce companies. However, it is easy to buy goods through online there are chances of being cheated by sellers. Fake goods can be found in online shopping because it is intangible, texture cannot be known by buyers. Although returning of goods is available it takes time and process is to fulfill. Above all to deal with this issue buyers should pay extra attention while buying product, customer should check site or app is registered or eligible. If found it is selling fake items then need to inform to government which will take necessary action regarding it. To conclude online shopping is easy for us. However we should check review about site and do shopping through registered site/app to prevent from cheating and from fake products
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used
by every
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adults
to
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purchase
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goods
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through
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online
market, lots of choices can be
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found and
it is convenient
rather
going to market
physically
for shopping.

Online
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shopping
is easy for all saves time of customer. Reviews are
also
available which will
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help
buyers to
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check
about
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goods
which they tend to
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buy
. E-commerce is in hype
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now
, all
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goods
manufacturer are either selling
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through
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own
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online
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site
or are giving to agent to sell
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through
there app or web
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site
. By
drastically
increasing in web
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shopping
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fake
gods are
also
being sold
by e-commerce
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companies
.

However
, it is easy to
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buy
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goods
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through
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online
there are chances of
being cheated
by sellers.
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Fake
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goods
can
be found
in
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online
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shopping
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because
it is intangible, texture cannot
be known
by buyers. Although returning of
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goods
is available it takes time and process is to fulfill.

Above all
to deal with this issue buyers should pay extra attention while buying product, customer should
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check
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site
or app
is registered
or eligible. If found it is selling
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fake
items then need to inform to
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government
which will take necessary action regarding it.

To conclude
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online
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shopping
is easy for us.
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However
we should
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check
review about
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site
and do
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shopping
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through
registered site/app to
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prevent
from cheating and from
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fake
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products
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IELTS essay Internet crime is increasing rapidly as growing numbers of people purchase goods over the internet. What can be done to tackle this problem?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
223 words
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