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international tourist should pay more than the local visitor

international tourist should pay more than the local visitor K3lY0
Nowadays, people want to explore different places that is why for some people traveling is becoming hobby. While there are some who believe that to show attractions' value people should get more money from them, It is my firm belief that government ought to make vistor places inexpensive as it helps country's tourism On the one hand, to make tourists visit to the country is the reason why should some countries should attract tourists' attention with visit to in cheap historical places. Firstly, for some countries tourism makes up a large propotionof the national income. All people search for country which they can spend less money. For example, in Samarqand region all things are inexpensive, that is why every year large numbers of tourists come to travel and it brings money in our country's budget If visiting tourists places is not that expensive, they will buy other things too. For instance, they can afford to buy souvenirs, food and clothes also they use facilities of tourist's attractions. It will be useful for country and its economy On the other hand, historical buildings can be damaged by large numbees of tourists. If ancient buildings were damaged, it willbe expensive to restore it. That is why, it should be cost expensive. For example, last year in Switzerland because of lots of tourists the prehistoric areas were demolished and government spent loads of money to restore it. In conclusion, some people think people who comes abroad should pay money for historic places, I believe that everyone locals and tourists ought to be equal
Nowadays,
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want to explore
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different
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places
that is
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some
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people
traveling is becoming hobby. While there are
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some
who believe that to
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show
attractions' value
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people
should
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get
more
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money
from them, It is my firm belief that
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government
ought to
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make
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vistor
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places
inexpensive as it
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helps
country's
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tourism


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make
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tourists
visit to the
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country
is the reason why should
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some
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countries
should attract tourists' attention with visit to in
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cheap
historical
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places
.
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, for
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some
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countries
tourism
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makes
up a large
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propotionof
the national income. All
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people
search for
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country
which they can spend less
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money
.
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, in
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Samarqand
region all things are inexpensive,
that is
why every year large numbers of
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tourists
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come
to travel and it brings
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money
in our country's budget

If visiting
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tourists
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places
is not that expensive, they will
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buy
other things too.
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, they can afford to
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buy
souvenirs, food and clothes
also
they
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use
facilities of tourist's attractions. It will be useful for
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country
and its
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economy


On the other hand
, historical buildings can
be damaged
by large
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numbees
of
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tourists
. If ancient buildings
were damaged
, it
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willbe
expensive to restore it.
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why, it should
be cost
expensive.
For example
, last year in Switzerland
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because
of lots of
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tourists
the prehistoric areas
were demolished
and
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government
spent loads of
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money
to restore it.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
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who
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comes
abroad should pay
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money
for historic
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places
, I believe

that everyone locals and
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tourists
ought to be equal
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IELTS essay international tourist should pay more than the local visitor

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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