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The reading claims that zoos are essential to a modren culture that places value in animal life and provides three reasons of support. In contrast, the professor states that many activists have problems and they don't believe that zoos have benefits to animals and society and he refutes each of the author's reasons. First, the article avers that animals are treated well in zoos. On the other hand, the lecturer opposes this point by mentioning that animals are not treated as pretty as the author explains. In fact, the professor says that in one zoo a question was rose. According to the professor, two pandas died becuase they exposed to rats poison. The managers in the zoo couldn't prevent this case, and this case showed a lack of care in zoos. Second, the article asserts that zoos are no longer seen as or marked as forms of entertainment, but as education. Conversely, the lecture counters this point by stating that zoos are still seen as an entertainment. Actually, the professor explains that the house of animals are attracted to visitors, and they send a message to the guests that it is ok to use animals for our own purposes. In addition, the visitors are not appreciate that because they see animals in their artificial exhibits. This disputes the second point in the passage. Third, the reading posits that zoos preserve endangered species. However, the professor casts doubt on this point by saying that this point is problematic. He mentions that the example in the passage is one success and zoos have poor success stories. Moreover, the professor states that holding one species in zoos will result in birth defect since these animals need to interbreed in their natural exhibit, so there is no advantage of saving species. This appears a contradiction to the information made in the passage.
The reading claims that zoos are essential to a
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modren
culture that places value in
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animal
life and provides three reasons of support.
In contrast
, the
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professor
states that
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many
activists have
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problems and
they don't believe that zoos have benefits to
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animals
and
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society and
he refutes each of the author's reasons.

First
, the article avers that
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animals
are treated
well in zoos.
On the other hand
, the lecturer opposes this
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point
by mentioning that
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animals
are not treated as pretty as the author
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explains
. In fact, the
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professor
says that in one zoo a question was rose. According to the
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professor
, two pandas
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died
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becuase
they exposed to
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rats
poison. The managers in the zoo couldn't
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prevent
this case, and this case
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showed
a lack of care in zoos.

Second, the article asserts that zoos are no longer
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seen
as or marked as forms of entertainment,
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but
as education.
Conversely
, the lecture counters this
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point
by stating that zoos are
still
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seen
as an entertainment. Actually, the
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professor
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explains
that the
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house
of
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animals
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are
attracted to visitors, and they
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send
a message to the guests that it is ok to
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use
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animals
for our
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own
purposes.
In addition
, the visitors are not
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appreciate
that
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because
they
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see
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animals
in their artificial exhibits. This disputes the second
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point
in the passage.

Third, the reading posits that zoos preserve endangered species.
However
, the
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professor
casts doubt on this
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point
by saying that this
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point
is problematic. He mentions that the example in the passage is one success and zoos have poor success stories.
Moreover
, the
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professor
states that holding one species in zoos will result in birth defect since these
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animals
need to interbreed in their natural exhibit,
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so
there is no advantage of saving species. This appears a contradiction to the information made in the passage.

IELTS essay integrated zoos

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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