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Integrated essay " Michael Angelo art"

Integrated essay " Michael Angelo art" m1DQA
The reading passage is about the art work of Michael Angelo which was the most famous art of the Renaissance period. The listening passage however, casts doubts on the credits given to him in the reading passage. First of all, The professor quotes that the statue of David, which the reading passage considers to be one of Michael Angelo's best master pieces, is a work that he had completed after another sculpture who did not really finish it. Therefore, according to the professor, this particular piece was never inspired by Michael on the first hand, and he should not be touted on it. In addition to this, the professor also mentions that Michael should not also be credited on his work for decorating the ceiling of the Sistine Chapel, because such a work required the assistance of thousands other artists. Thus, the professor thinks that he could be credited for managing the work and not for accomplishing it. On the other hand, the reading passage mentions that although the work on the Sistine Chapel had taken 4o years and yet had not been finished by Michael. However, decorating its ceiling remains one of his significant art works.
The
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reading
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passage
is about the art
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work
of Michael Angelo which was the most
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famous
art of the Renaissance period. The listening
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passage
however
, casts doubts on the credits
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given
to him in the
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passage.

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First of all
, The
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professor
quotes that the statue of David, which the
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reading
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passage
considers to be one of Michael Angelo's best master pieces, is a
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work
that he had completed after another sculpture who did not
really
finish it.
Therefore
, according to the
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professor
, this particular piece was never inspired by Michael on the
first
hand, and he should not
be touted
on it.

In addition
to this, the
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professor
also
mentions that Michael should not
also
be credited
on his
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work
for decorating the ceiling of the Sistine Chapel,
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because
such a
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work
required the assistance of thousands other artists.
Thus
, the
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professor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thinks
that he could
be credited
for managing the
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work
and not for accomplishing it.
On the other hand
, the
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reading
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passage
mentions that although the
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work
on the Sistine Chapel had taken 4o years and
yet
had not
been finished
by Michael.
However
, decorating its ceiling remains one of his significant art works.
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IELTS essay Integrated essay " Michael Angelo art"

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
197 words
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