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inspite of advancement in agriculture many people around the world are still hungry. what are causes of this and solutions.

inspite of advancement in agriculture many people around the world are still hungry. what are causes of this and solutions. YdJaj
In this modernized era almost nations are developed and every country produced different varieties of food according to their weather condition. In this essay, we will discuss about advancement in agriculture and, nowadays people become more hungry. In my opinion I discuss my view in further paragraphsBy analysing the statement and explaining further. First and foremost it is crucial for farmers to take the benefits of advancement. There are a lot of devices that are good for agriculture. Every country grows different food for their people. however nowadays, people still hungry because there are many poor people in every country who do not have money to eat food because of the unemployment. Well we know that there are many advancement in agriculture but there are only beneficial for those people who have money to easily buy itIn addition, there are different ways to solve this problem like it is a responsibility of government to distribute food at a minimum cost. First of all government do cost of machines which farmers use in agriculture and also remove taxes from products which people buy to eat easily. Moreover, it is also beneficial for farmers to grow product easily at minimum price. After that people buy it easily. According to me government should provide grain to poor people then thik problem be solved. To conclude, although we know that there are many people who donot eat food but it is a responsibility of government to provide food to every people who live easy on earth
In this modernized era almost nations
are developed
and every country produced
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different
varieties of
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food
according to their weather condition. In this essay, we will
Did you mean simply "discuss advancement"? You do not need the word "about" here.
discuss about advancement
in
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agriculture
and, nowadays
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people
become more hungry.
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In
my opinion I discuss my view in
further
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paragraphsBy
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analysing
the statement and explaining
further
.
First
and foremost it is crucial for farmers to take the benefits of advancement. There are
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a lot of
devices that are
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good
for
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agriculture
. Every country grows
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different
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food
for their
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people
.
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however
nowadays,
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people
still
hungry
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because
there are
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many
poor
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people
in every country
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who
do not have money to eat
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food
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because
of the unemployment. Well we know that there are
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many advancement
in
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agriculture
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but
there are
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only
beneficial for those
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people
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who
have money to
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easily
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buy
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itIn
addition, there are
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different
ways to solve this problem like it is a responsibility of
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government
to distribute
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food
at a minimum cost.
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First of all
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government
do cost of machines which farmers
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use
in
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agriculture
and
also
remove taxes from products which
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people
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buy
to eat
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easily
.
Moreover
, it is
also
beneficial for farmers to grow product
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easily
at minimum price.
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that
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people
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buy
it
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easily
.
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According to me
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government
should provide grain to poor
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people
then
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thik
problem
be solved
.
To conclude
, although we know that there are
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many
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people
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who
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donot
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food
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but
it is a responsibility of
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government
to provide
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food
to every
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people
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who
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live
easy on
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earth
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IELTS essay inspite of advancement in agriculture many people around the world are still hungry. what are causes of this and solutions.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
251 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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