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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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The recent updates deal with variety of issues on climate changes in every countries along with the industrialization and economic development. However, environment and sustainable development must be put on the priority because nothing can be compensated for the loss of living environment and climate change. When climate change happens, there is a significant change on different kinds of animals and plants, and the area of land is also reduced. As we all know, there are more and more flooding happen everywhere in the world recently. One of the reasons is the area of forest is declined considerably in some countries especially in Asia and Africa. The situation of wood widespread exploitation exited in most of developing countries to serve the demand of people in construction, housing and furniture leads to the thousand hectares of trees were cut and destroyed. The consequence of this behavior is many fierce flooding come over killed thousands of house and people. Moreover, the loss of trees also affect to the environment around that area, climate temperature is higher and the earth become hotter. The change in climate also influence on the migration and existence of some animals and the growth of forest. Another disaster is caused by warmer climate is the ice melt in South and North Poles. As the result, the mean sea level increased, in some areas land were eroded and lost because of river and sea. Some countries will face serious erosion in 30 -50 years later. Vietnam is an typical example of this disaster as we will be lost around 20 percent of the land, specifically the whole area of western provinces around 50 years later if we have no solution from now. This issue will also happen in some countries in Southeast Asia like Thailand, Cambodia. . . Millions of people will be affected and have to relocate to highland areas, furthermore the food supply will also be decreased significantly as most of these areas are invaded by sea are now the main area to supply rice and other food resources in the region and other areas in the world. So, this is really a nightmare for human being in next few decades. In conclusion, unless people reach an break-thought in technology to control the effect of climate change or food supply people can survive with this realistic, human being must consider the negative effect of industrialization and excess exploitation on the environment and natural resources to limit or avoid the globally climate change.
The recent updates deal with variety of issues on
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along with the industrialization and economic development.
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and sustainable development
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because
nothing can
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for the loss of living
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environment
and
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. When
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happens, there is a significant
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change
on
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different
kinds of animals and plants, and the
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area
of land is
also
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reduced
.

As we all know, there are more and more flooding happen everywhere in the world recently. One of the reasons is the
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area
of forest
is declined
considerably
in
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some
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countries
especially
in Asia and Africa. The situation of wood widespread exploitation exited in most of developing
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countries
to serve the demand of
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people
in construction, housing and furniture leads to the thousand hectares of trees were
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cut
and
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destroyed
. The consequence of this behavior is
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fierce flooding
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come
over killed thousands of
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house
and
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people
.
Moreover
, the loss of trees
also
affect to the
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environment
around that
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area
,
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climate
temperature is higher and the earth become hotter. The
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change
in
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climate
also
influence on the migration and existence of
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some
animals and the growth of forest.

Another disaster
is caused
by warmer
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climate
is the ice melt in South and North Poles. As the result, the mean sea level increased, in
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some
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areas
land
were eroded
and lost
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because
of river and sea.
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Some
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countries
will face serious erosion in 30 -50 years later. Vietnam is
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an
typical example of this disaster as we will
be lost
around 20 percent of the land,
specifically
the whole
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area
of western provinces around 50 years later if we have no solution from
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now
. This issue will
also
happen in
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some
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countries
in Southeast Asia like Thailand, Cambodia.
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Millions of
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people
will be
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affected
and
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have to
relocate to highland
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,
furthermore
the food supply will
also
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significantly
as most of these
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are invaded
by sea are
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now
the main
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area
to supply rice and other food resources in the region and other
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areas
in the world.
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, this is
really
a nightmare for human being in
next
few decades.

In conclusion
, unless
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reach
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an
break-
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thought
in technology to control the effect of
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climate
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change
or food supply
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people
can survive with this realistic, human being
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must
consider the
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negative
effect of industrialization and excess exploitation on the
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environment
and natural resources to limit or avoid the globally
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climate
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change
.

IELTS essay Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities.

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415 words
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