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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Environmental improvement can only be done by governments and large companies, not by the individuals. However, I completely agree with this statement due to the two reasons. First of all, governments and large companies has the ability to invest on environmental improvement. Air pollution caused by lead which is emitted by the vehicle. To reduce lead emission, electric transportation systems are required. To develop electric vehicles huge investment is need on automobile industry. Sound pollution is also part of the environmental hazards. It occur due to low graded horn system in vehicles. Hydrolic horns are the best solution for but required more investment on the vehicle. All this can only be done by governments and large companies. For example, in 2008, India faced these types of environmental problem and it was solved by the involvement of governments and large companies. To eliminate these problem governments has to pay more than 10 billion USD. Environmental improvement can also be controlled by making people aware regarding pollutents such as lead, arsenic, carbon mono oxide gas etc. This awareness programme has to run by governments and large companies may play a role as a monitoring body. Government also has to make some rules and regulations which are broadcasted through the awareness programme and government has to take initiative to implement these rules and regulations by the citizen. For example, Malaysian government forced their citizen not to use fossil fuel vehicle that produce huge carbon mono oxide which increases the breathing problem. In conclusion, governments and large companies can improve the environmental quality of a country by investing and maintaining environmental rules and regulations.
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, not by the individuals.
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with this statement due to the two reasons.

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First of all
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and
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large
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companies
has the ability to invest on
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environmental
improvement. Air pollution caused by lead which
is emitted
by the
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vehicle
. To
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reduce
lead emission, electric transportation systems
are required
. To develop electric
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vehicles
huge investment
is need
on automobile industry. Sound pollution is
also
part of the
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environmental
hazards. It
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occur
due to low graded horn system in
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vehicles
.
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Hydrolic
horns are the best solution for
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required more investment on the
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vehicle
. All this can
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only
be done
by
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and
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.
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, in 2008, India faced these types of
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problem and
it
was solved
by the involvement of
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and
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. To eliminate these problem
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governments
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has to
pay more than 10 billion USD.

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also
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people
aware regarding
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pollutents
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programme
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run by
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and regulations which
are broadcasted
through the awareness
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programme
and
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government
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has to
take initiative to implement these
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rules
and regulations by the citizen.
For example
, Malaysian
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government
forced their citizen not to
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use
fossil fuel
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vehicle
that produce huge carbon mono oxide which increases the breathing problem.

In conclusion
,
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governments
and
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large
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companies
can
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improve
the
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environmental
quality of a country by investing and maintaining
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environmental
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rules
and regulations.
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IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.0
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