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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.8

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 8
With the rapid technological advancements over the last century, our lives have surely become easier. However, this has come at the cost of a briskly deteriorating environment around us. Environment related issues like air pollution and global warming are the talk of the town today. Many think that only governments and large companies can help alleviate this problem. However, I disagree with this notion and think that individuals have an equally vital role to play in improving the environment. There are various ways in which individuals can contribute to a cleaner and healthier environment. Moreover, these measures do not require an extraordinary amount of effort. Instead, they are just slight modifications in our daily way of living. For example, people can choose to prefer public transport over private transport. In this way, the pollution causing emissions from cars can be reduced. The most important thing that can be done is to plant trees in lawns both outside and inside their houses. Planting trees is critical as it helps clean the environment and most importantly adds oxygen to the atmosphere. People can avoid usage of plastic bags and use more environmentally friendly bags that are biodegradable. Another step that could be taken is recycling of plastic waste that can turn the plastic waste into more useful things. To conclude, it can be said that even though the bigger action like policy formation or introducing regulations, has to be done on the part of the government or large companies; however, the responsibility of a cleaner environment cannot solely be put on these two. We as individuals of the environment that we live in have an equally vital role to play. Even the slightest of actions when taken by everybody can pile up and have a significant impact in helping improve our environment. Everybody has to live in the same environment and hence, everyone should own improving the environment as their own duty.
With the rapid technological advancements over the last century, our
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lives
have
surely
become easier.
However
, this has
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come
at the cost of a
briskly
deteriorating
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environment
around us.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Environment
related issues like air pollution and global warming are the talk of the town
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today
.
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Many
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think
that
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only
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governments
and large
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companies
can
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help
alleviate this problem.
However
, I disagree with this notion and
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think
that individuals have an
equally
vital role to play in improving the environment.

There are various ways in which individuals can contribute to a cleaner and healthier
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
Moreover
, these measures do not require an extraordinary amount of effort.
Instead
, they are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
slight modifications in our daily way of living.
For example
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can choose to prefer public transport over private transport. In this way, the pollution causing emissions from cars can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
. The most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
thing that can
be done
is to plant trees in lawns both outside and inside their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
. Planting trees is critical as it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
clean the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and most
importantly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
adds
oxygen to the atmosphere.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
can avoid usage of plastic bags and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
more
environmentally
friendly bags that are biodegradable. Another step that could
be taken
is recycling of plastic waste that can turn the plastic waste into more useful things.

To conclude
, it can
be said
that
even though
the bigger action like policy formation or introducing regulations,
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has to
be done
on the part of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
or large
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companies
;
however
, the responsibility of a cleaner
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
cannot
solely
be put
on these two. We as individuals of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
that we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in have an
equally
vital role to play. Even the slightest of actions when taken by everybody can pile up and have a significant impact in helping
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. Everybody
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and
hence
, everyone should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
improving the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
as their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
duty.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 8

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
320 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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