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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems v. 1
The best solution for reducing the level of traffic congestion and the problems of pollution is increasing the cost of fossil fuel. I am of the opinion that I partially agree with this statement. The supporting reasons will be given in the following paragraphs. Increasing the price of gasoline can be seen as the best solution that possibly improves traffic jams and pollution for various reasons. The first and conceivably most obvious reason for this is the decreasing number of vehicles, resulting in people have more expenditure that is contributed to using public transportation. A clear illustration of this is that people who have a stable income might be impact on their daily lifes. Due to the fact that they are likely to use public transportations instead of private cars because it is cheaper than petrol prices. This solution brings about the fewer carsare used, the less co2 are emitted. On the other hand, there are convincing arguments to calm that increasing the price of gas is not the best way. The most important one is that restricted cars in each area, especially the heart of the city. It is more efficient and realistic due to the fact that (the) controlling gas price is too difficult and complicated. It, as a consequence, effects a variety of factors such as land and air transports. Last but not least, encouraging people to use more public transport is another clear reason to consider. If governments campaign effectively, more and more people will using private cars instead. To conclude, although the price of gas is increased, it can solve the problems in the short term. Therefore, (authority and) the government should cooperate to figure out this problem in the long term.
The best solution for reducing the level of traffic congestion and the problems of pollution is increasing the cost of fossil fuel. I am of the opinion that I
partially
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agree
with this statement. The supporting
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reasons
will be
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given
in the following paragraphs.

Increasing the
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price
of gasoline can be
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seen
as the best solution that
possibly
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improves
traffic jams and pollution for various
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reasons
. The
first
and
conceivably
most obvious
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reason
for this is the decreasing number of vehicles, resulting in
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people
have more expenditure that
is contributed
to using public transportation. A
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clear
illustration of this is that
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people
who have a stable income might be impact on their daily
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lifes
. Due to the fact that they are likely to
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use
public transportations
instead
of private cars
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because
it is cheaper than petrol
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prices
. This solution brings about the fewer
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carsare
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used
, the less co2
are emitted
.

On the other hand
, there are convincing arguments to calm that increasing the
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price
of gas is not the best way. The most
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important
one is that restricted cars in each area,
especially
the heart of the city. It is more efficient and realistic due to the fact that (the) controlling gas
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price
is too difficult and complicated. It, as a consequence, effects a variety of factors such as land and air transports. Last
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but
not least, encouraging
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people
to
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use
more public transport is another
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clear
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reason
to consider. If
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governments
campaign
effectively
, more and more
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people
will using private cars
instead
.

To conclude
, although the
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price
of gas
is increased
, it can solve the problems in the short term.
Therefore
, (authority and) the
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government
should cooperate to figure out this problem in the long term.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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