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Increased discipline has given rise to the fact that parents and teachers are using Corporal punishments. Is it a positive development or a negative.

Increased discipline has given rise to the fact that parents and teachers are using Corporal punishments. Is it a positive development or a negative. gxp1L
Much of the world places premium on imbibing discipline manners in student’s in one way or other which has become a buzzword that some strict actions are taken by tutors as well as by parents to inculcate ethics in children. Also, it plays a crucial role in student’s life. Certain section of the society consider corporal punishment to increase discipline as a positive development while opponents consider it as negative development. However, I personally feel it as negative growth. My essay will delve into the same motion and will bring a plausible conclusion. At the outset, needless to say that there are a plethora of arguments that strict punishments to learners as a negative growth among them. The most remarkable one is the pupils who are forced to be ethical and in order to enforce the moral values among them the actions taken by parents and teachers make them isolative person. At the same time, they used to become introvert. To exemplify, at Don Public school, tutors and parents at home, torture pupils for being discipline at every moment. This turn Them into introvert as they feel shy to explain their feelings and remain isolated from surroundings. Therefore, there is no view against that why an army people consider it as negative development. Moving further, a number of learners learn things if they are imbibe in lovable manner. In other words, pupil learn more when the things taught to them in polite way in spite of using some Corporal actions which might make them aggressive and violent by nature. For instance, a survey has been conducted in China in 2013, which shows that 33% of students become rudely by nature when the ought to face some strict punishments given by their instructors in learning institutions. Thus, student must be treated well and in polite way to make them good person for the whole life. To recapitulate, the above mentioned paragraphs lend to the assertion that Corporal punishments to pupils have more drawbacks. That is why, they should be avoided which lead to positive development.
Much of the world places premium on imbibing discipline manners in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student’s
in one way or other which has become a buzzword that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
strict actions
are taken
by tutors
as well
as by parents to inculcate ethics in children.
Also
, it plays a crucial role in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student’s
life. Certain section of the society consider corporal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
punishment
to increase discipline as a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
development while opponents consider it as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
negative
development.
However
, I
personally
feel it as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
negative
growth. My essay will delve into the same motion and will bring a plausible conclusion.

At the outset, needless to say that there are a plethora of arguments that strict
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
punishments
to learners as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
negative
growth among them. The most remarkable one is the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pupils
who
are forced
to be ethical and in order to enforce the moral values among them the actions taken by parents and teachers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them
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isolative
person. At the same time, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to become introvert. To exemplify, at Don Public school, tutors and parents at home, torture
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pupils
for being discipline at every moment. This turn Them into introvert as they feel shy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
their feelings and remain isolated from surroundings.
Therefore
, there is no view against that why an army
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
consider it as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
negative
development.

Moving
further
, a number of learners learn things if they are
Consider using a past participle here: "imbibed".
imbibe
in lovable manner.
In other words
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pupil
learn more when the things taught to them in polite way
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
in spite of
using
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Corporal actions which might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them aggressive and violent by nature.
For instance
, a survey has
been conducted
in China in 2013, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that 33% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
become
rudely
by nature when the ought to face
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
strict
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
punishments
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
by their instructors in learning institutions.
Thus
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be treated
well and in polite way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
person for the whole life.

To recapitulate, the above mentioned paragraphs lend to the assertion that Corporal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
punishments
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pupils
have more drawbacks.
That is
why, they should
be avoided
which lead to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
development.
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IELTS essay Increased discipline has given rise to the fact that parents and teachers are using Corporal punishments. Is it a positive development or a negative.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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