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include the name of the patient, the problem the patient was experiencing and what treatment was suggested.

include the name of the patient, the problem the patient was experiencing and what treatment was suggested. p10Vd
September 24th 2021. 15: 30 Name of patient: Jonh. He has lives at 137 PVD st district 9. He had eaten the hard bitscuit and then he realized that his mandibular first incisor was fractured. He said that his gum still had had bleeding. John feels too bad, he does not want to communicate with anyone till his teeth was fixed. Next week, he will back to school so he wants to be treated now. He will come here with his mother around 30 minute to have a thorough check. The doctor recommented he should maintain his tooth clean, and apply a cold compress on his face to minimize swelling, hurt. He also provided the child some options like Veneers, or filling with the composite material in order that the baby did not fear about the apperence
September 24th 2021. 15: 30

Name of patient:
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Jonh
.

He has
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lives
at 137 PVD st district 9. He had eaten the
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hard
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bitscuit and
then he realized that his mandibular
first
incisor
was fractured
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
He
said that his gum
still
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had had
bleeding. John feels too
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
, he does not want to communicate with anyone till his teeth was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fixed
.
Next
week, he will back to school
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so
he wants to
be treated
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
. He will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
here with his mother around 30 minute to have a thorough
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
. The doctor
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recommented
he should maintain his tooth clean, and apply a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
compress on his face to minimize swelling, hurt. He
also
provided the child
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
options like Veneers, or filling with the composite material in order that the baby did not fear about the
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apperence
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IELTS essay include the name of the patient, the problem the patient was experiencing and what treatment was suggested.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
136 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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