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In your opinion. why is the circus still a popular form of ente rtainment in the modem electronic age?

In your opinion. why is the circus still a popular form of ente rtainment in the modem electronic age? nljP
The circus is still an attractive type of entertainment nowadays. Although myriad types of amusement are now available between our hands by means of phones, tablets and laptops, circuses can still draw attentions of many people. In my point of view, main reasons for that are children and traditional appeal of it. Firstly it is known by everyone that today people are utilising and dealing with technology and its advantages more than everything else. It has been an undeniable part of our everyday life. A life without electronics is imperceptible for modern people. However, people always want something distinct and spread their sights to visual and attractive distractions. One of the most spectacular and concurrent attractions is undoubtedly the circus whose history is extended to thousands of years ago. Various shows there have fascinated people for a long time and are still fascinating enough to people who have never seen acrobats, dancers, clowns and people who are playing with domestic lions, elephants, snakes and other dangerous animals. On the other hand, people have the other reasons to participate in circus shows their children. Kids who are interested in almost everything are keen on to watch dancing animals and jugglers. Hence, parents take their children to this kind of shows to make them aware of what is going on out there and show them exotic animals. Therefore, amazed kids want with a desire to go the circus again and observe other types of shows. To conclude, in my opinion, visual attractions of the circus and attraction by children are two predominant reasons for the popularity of the circus. It seems its progress in popularity will not decrease in forthcoming future too.
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is
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an attractive type of entertainment nowadays. Although myriad types of amusement are
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now
available between our hands by means of phones, tablets and laptops, circuses can
still
draw attentions of
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many
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people
. In my point of view, main reasons for that are
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children
and traditional appeal of it.

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it
is known
by everyone that
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today
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people
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and dealing with technology and its advantages more than everything else. It has been an undeniable part of our everyday life. A life without electronics is imperceptible for modern
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people
.
However
,
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people
always want something distinct and spread their sights to visual and attractive distractions. One of the most spectacular and concurrent attractions is
undoubtedly
the
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circus
whose history
is extended
to thousands of years ago. Various
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shows
there have fascinated
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people
for a long time and are
still
fascinating
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enough
to
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people
who have never
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seen
acrobats, dancers, clowns and
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people
who are playing with domestic lions, elephants, snakes and
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other
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dangerous
animals.

On the
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hand,
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people
have the
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reasons to participate in
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circus
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shows
their
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children
. Kids who
are interested
in almost everything are keen on to
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watch
dancing animals and jugglers.
Hence
, parents take their
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children
to this kind of
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shows
to
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make
them aware of what is going on out there and
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show
them exotic animals.
Therefore
, amazed kids want with a desire to go the
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circus
again and observe
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other
types of
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shows
.

To conclude
, in my opinion, visual attractions of the
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circus
and attraction by
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children
are two predominant reasons for the popularity of the
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circus
. It seems its progress in popularity will not decrease in forthcoming future too.
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IELTS essay In your opinion. why is the circus still a popular form of ente rtainment in the modem electronic age?

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