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In today's modern society, many people choose to wait longer to embark on parenthood compared to prior generations.There are several causes for this tendency, and it could have some repercussions on family life as well as society.

In today's modern society, many people choose to wait longer to embark on parenthood compared to prior generations. There are several causes for this tendency, and it could have some repercussions on family life as well as society. nx9rK
In today's modern society, many people choose to wait longer to embark on parenthood compared to prior generations. There are several causes for this tendency, and it could have some repercussions on family life as well as society. On the one hand, there are some reasons why these days,  more individuals decide not to have babies as early as previous generations. Firstly, young people's salaries are not enough to raise children, moreover, it will be difficult for them to balance between work and life. Therefore, many people want to obtain financial and emotional stability before becoming parents to ensure a favorable environment for the child's development. Furthermore, because women have equal access to education as men, they want to prioritize pursuing their personal goals when they are young. If they married and had a child when they were young, they will struggle to spend time to pursue their passions while also caring for their children. On the other hand, putting off parenthood might have some implications for both family life and society. The first impact is that having children when they are too old will result in a decrease in the quality of the future workforce. If they give birth too late, the number of children with health impairments will increase. In addition, having children later will cause a significant generation gap between parents and children. Parents will find it very hard to communicate with and understand their children, which leads to arguments and conflicts that will enventually seperate them from each other. In conclusion, there are several reasons why many people tend to postpone having babies in their life, and this trend might have some adverse impacts on individual life and society
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many
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people
choose to wait longer to embark on parenthood compared to prior generations. There are several causes for this tendency, and it could have
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some
repercussions on family
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life
as well
as society.

On the one hand, there are
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some
reasons why these days,
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more individuals decide not to have babies as early as previous generations.
Firstly
, young
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people
's salaries are not
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enough
to raise
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children
,
moreover
, it will be difficult for them to balance between work and
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life
.
Therefore
,
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many
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people
want to obtain financial and emotional stability
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before
becoming parents to ensure a favorable environment for the child's development.
Furthermore
,
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because
women have equal access to education as
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men
, they want to prioritize pursuing their personal goals when they are young. If they married and had a child when they were young, they will struggle to spend time to pursue their passions while
also
caring for their children.

On the other hand
, putting off parenthood might have
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some
implications for both family
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life
and society. The
first
impact is that having
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children
when they are too
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old
will result in a decrease in the quality of the future workforce. If they give birth too late, the number of
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children
with health impairments will increase.
In addition
, having
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children
later will cause a significant generation gap between parents and
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children
. Parents will find it
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very
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hard
to communicate with and understand their
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children
, which leads to arguments and conflicts that will
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seperate
them from each other.

In conclusion
, there are several reasons why
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many
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people
tend to postpone having babies in their
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life
, and this trend might have
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some
adverse impacts on individual
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life
and society
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IELTS essay In today's modern society, many people choose to wait longer to embark on parenthood compared to prior generations. There are several causes for this tendency, and it could have some repercussions on family life as well as society.

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