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In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that salinity of The Salton Sea is upbringing forthcoming problems which result in the destruction of the bird and fish population and endorse its idea by presenting three resolution.

In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that salinity of The Salton Sea is upbringing forthcoming problems which result in the destruction of the bird and fish population and endorse its idea by presenting three resolution. wBXXr
In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that salinity of The Salton Sea is upbringing forthcoming problems which result in the destruction of the bird and fish population and endorse its idea by presenting three resolution. On the other hand, the lecturer mentions that the solution provided in the reading are unpractical and dubious, and gainsays each argument in the reading. First and foremost, the writer begins by asserting that the removal of saltwater from the lake by desalination would be helpful. The speaker on the listening refutes this comment by insisting that the desalination process though reduce salinity, but it will result in serious other problems. To be more specific, as a result of desalination, certain salt and toxic chemicals are deposited and left behind. He exemplifies that by selenium. He explains that the remaining debris of Selenium could result in serious health problems when it will be dispersed by wind. Furthermore, the lecturer points out that for dilution solution government needs to construct canals or pipelines, and the government has not enough resources to build that pipeline. In other words, the nearest shoreline for this process is 100km away. Therefore, it could be a financial burden on the government. These claims clearly refute the writer's implication that dilution of the Salton sea with lake water by building pipelines or canals solve the issue. Lastly, the writer wraps up the arguments by declaring that partitioning the lake into separate sections( high and low salinity)would reduce the salinity. Not surprisingly, the lecturer takes an issue with that by contending that the lake is geographically located in such an area where geological activities take place. He exemplifies this by the earthquake; that when it will happen, the barrier inside the sections of the lake will break, and water will be uniform again. Because high salinity water will be added to low salinity water, and hence this solution will not work too.
In this set of material, the writer
strongly
postulates that salinity of The Salton Sea is upbringing forthcoming problems which
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result
in the destruction of the bird and fish population and endorse its
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idea
by presenting three resolution.
On the other hand
, the lecturer mentions that the solution provided in the reading are unpractical and dubious, and gainsays each argument in the reading.

First
and foremost, the writer
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begins
by asserting that the removal of saltwater from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lake
by desalination would be helpful. The speaker on the listening refutes this comment by insisting that the desalination process though
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
salinity,
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but
it will
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result
in serious other problems. To be more specific, as a
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result
of desalination, certain salt and toxic chemicals
are deposited
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
behind. He exemplifies that by selenium. He
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explains
that the remaining debris of Selenium could
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result
in serious health problems when it will
be dispersed
by wind.

Furthermore
, the lecturer points out that for dilution solution
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government
needs to construct canals or pipelines, and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has not
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enough
resources to build that pipeline.
In other words
, the nearest shoreline for this process is
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100km
away.
Therefore
, it could be a financial burden on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
. These claims
clearly
refute the writer's implication that dilution of the Salton sea with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lake
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water
by building pipelines or canals solve the issue.

Lastly
, the writer wraps up the arguments by declaring that partitioning the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lake
into separate sections
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(
high and low salinity)would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the salinity. Not
surprisingly
, the lecturer takes an issue with that by contending that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lake
is
geographically
located in such an area where geological activities take place. He exemplifies this by the earthquake; that when it will happen, the barrier inside the sections of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lake
will break, and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
will be uniform again.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
high salinity
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water
will be
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added
to low salinity
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water
, and
hence
this solution will not work too.
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IELTS essay In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that salinity of The Salton Sea is upbringing forthcoming problems which result in the destruction of the bird and fish population and endorse its idea by presenting three resolution.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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