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In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that franchising is of paramount importance for people who want to have their own business, and provides three advantages to endorse its idea.

In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that franchising is of paramount importance for people who want to have their own business, and provides three advantages to endorse its idea. kYEE2
In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that franchising is of paramount importance for people who want to have their own business, and provides three advantages to endorse its idea. On the other hand, the lecturer states that the reasons provided in the article are questionable and dubious, and gainsays each of its arguments from the article. First and foremost, the reading begins by asserting that franchising provides business owners with an opportunity to get reliable suppliers and prevent them from losses. The lecturer refutes this claim by insisting that a franchise company, in reality, forces the owners to buy the goods and services from their suppliers. On the other hand, independent companies can get equivalent services at much cheaper prices, but companies associated with the franchise cannot buy those services independently and have to buy expensive suppliers' services. Furthermore, he mentions the fact that franchised company has to give 6% of sum total salary to an established company, then in return, they get an advertisement. Moreover, those advertisements are not alone for a single owner's company, many other businesses and stores get benefits too and, an established company is basically advertising its own brand or name. These claims clearly refute the writer's implication that franchising provides companies with the opportunity for advertisement. Ultimately, the writer wraps its arguments by stating that franchising gives security to businesses as they reduced the risk proportions. Not surprisingly, the lecturer rebates this claim by contending that companies could reduce the risks but do not provide security. To be more specific, the reading did not talk about another important aspect which businesses owner can get benefit from. That is buying businesses from already existing independent owners, who really want to sell their businesses. If owners buy such businesses it would be much more successful and profitable.
In this set of material, the writer
strongly
postulates that
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franchising
is of paramount importance for
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people
who want to have their
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own
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business
, and
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provides
three advantages to endorse its
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idea
.
On the other hand
, the lecturer states that the reasons provided in the article are questionable and dubious, and gainsays each of its arguments from the article.

First
and foremost, the reading
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begins
by asserting that
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franchising
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provides
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business
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owners
with an opportunity to
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get
reliable suppliers and
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prevent
them from losses. The lecturer refutes this claim by insisting that a franchise
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company
, in reality, forces the
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owners
to
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buy
the
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goods
and services from their suppliers.
On the other hand
, independent
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companies
can
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get
equivalent services at much cheaper prices,
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but
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companies
associated with the franchise cannot
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buy
those services
independently
and
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have to
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buy
expensive suppliers' services.

Furthermore
, he mentions the fact that franchised
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company
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has to
give 6% of sum total salary to an established
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company
, then in return, they
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get
an advertisement.
Moreover
, those advertisements are not alone for a single owner's
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company
,
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many
other
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businesses
and stores
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get
benefits too and, an established
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company
is
basically
advertising its
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own
brand or name. These claims
clearly
refute the writer's implication that
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franchising
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provides
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companies
with the opportunity for advertisement.

Ultimately
, the writer wraps its arguments by stating that
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franchising
gives security to
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businesses
as they
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reduced
the
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risk
proportions. Not
surprisingly
, the lecturer rebates this claim by contending that
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companies
could
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reduce
the
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risks
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but
do not
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provide
security. To be more specific, the reading did not talk about another
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important
aspect which
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businesses
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owner
can
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get
benefit from.
That is
buying
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businesses
from already existing independent
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owners
, who
really
want to sell their
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businesses
. If
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owners
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buy
such
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businesses
it would be much more successful and profitable.
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IELTS essay In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that franchising is of paramount importance for people who want to have their own business, and provides three advantages to endorse its idea.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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