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In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that imposing a high tax on cigarettes and other unhealthy products would lead to several advantages for society, and provides three reasons to endorse its idea.

In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that imposing a high tax on cigarettes and other unhealthy products would lead to several advantages for society, and provides three reasons to endorse its idea. XG33A
In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that imposing a high tax on cigarettes and other unhealthy products would lead to several advantages for society, and provides three reasons to endorse its idea. The lecturer on the other hand mentions that each argument made in listening is dubious and impractical, and gainsays each argument from the reading. First and foremost, the reading begins by asserting that raising taxes would help people to prevent developing unhealthy habits. This is because when cigarettes are made costly fewer people will buy them. The lecturer refutes this claim by pointing out that increasing the tax on cigarettes will encourage people to buy cheaper cigarettes and similar products that are far more dangerous for public health. Moreover, when people spend their money on costly cigarettes, smokers would not have enough money left to buy healthy food options. That prone healthy risks to them. Furthermore, the speaker mentions that there are other ways to make fair policies but this taxing policy is fairly injustice considering the monthly income of the individuals. To be more specific, there are high earning and low earning people in a society. It might not be arduous for a high income earning person to pay high cigarette tax, but it will add up the financial burden for a low earning smoker. These claims refute the writer's implication that taxes are financially fair as it would apply to those who smoke, and not other individuals of society have to contribute. Lastly, the writer wraps up the arguments by declaring that taxation increases the revenue for the government which they can use for the development of the society. Not surprisingly, the lecturer takes issue with it by contending that the downside of this revenue would be that government would become too dependent on that. Not only the revenue of million dollars will lure the authorities not to implement fines on smokers, but also prohibit them to adopt radical measures such as policies for public and outdoor smoking
In this set of material, the writer
strongly
postulates that imposing a
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high
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tax
on
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cigarettes
and
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other
unhealthy products would lead to several advantages for
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society
, and provides three reasons to endorse its
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idea
. The lecturer on the
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other
hand mentions that each argument made in listening is dubious and impractical, and gainsays each argument from the reading.

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and foremost, the reading
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begins
by asserting that raising
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taxes
would
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help
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people
to
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prevent
developing unhealthy habits. This is
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because
when
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cigarettes
are made
costly fewer
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people
will
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buy
them. The lecturer refutes this claim by pointing out that increasing the
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tax
on
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cigarettes
will encourage
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people
to
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buy
cheaper
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cigarettes
and similar products that are far more
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dangerous
for public health.
Moreover
, when
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people
spend their money on costly
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cigarettes
, smokers would not have
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enough
money
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left
to
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buy
healthy food options. That prone healthy
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risks
to them.

Furthermore
, the speaker mentions that there are
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other
ways to
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make
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fair
policies
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but
this taxing policy is
fairly
injustice considering the monthly income of the individuals. To be more specific, there are
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high
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earning
and low
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earning
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people
in a
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society
. It might not be arduous for a
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high
income
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earning
person to pay
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high
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cigarette
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tax
,
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but
it will
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add
up the financial burden for a low
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earning
smoker. These claims refute the writer's implication that
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taxes
are
financially
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fair
as it would apply to those who smoke, and not
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other
individuals of
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society
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have to
contribute.

Lastly
, the writer wraps up the arguments by declaring that taxation increases the revenue for the
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government
which they can
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use
for the development of the
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society
. Not
surprisingly
, the lecturer takes issue with it by contending that the downside of this revenue would be that
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government
would become too dependent on that. Not
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only
the revenue of million dollars will lure the authorities not to implement fines on smokers,
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but
also
prohibit them to adopt radical measures such as policies for public and outdoor
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smoking

IELTS essay In this set of material, the writer strongly postulates that imposing a high tax on cigarettes and other unhealthy products would lead to several advantages for society, and provides three reasons to endorse its idea.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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