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In this present era, all students went to schools and universities, but there is one difference between the boys and girls field.

In this present era, all students went to schools and universities, but there is one difference between the boys and girls field. xn6w
In this present era, all students went to schools and universities, but there is one difference between the boys and girls field. Boys select science subjects, while girls choose arts subjects. This essay will give the reasons behind this situation and also explain possible solutions, which describe in the following paragraphs. To embarks with plenty of things which creates this phenomenon. First and foremost, the mindset of culture, they think girls become housewives in the future, therefore girls have not required to learn hard subjects like science. Furthermore, boys have the responsibility for earning in the future, and sciences provide a high salary as compared to another field. For example, in India, all high paid jobs belong to science streams such as doctors, engineers, and many more. These are the main reason for those inequalities in selecting subjects. On the other hand, there are a plethora of steps, which change these scenarios. Firstly, if the government gives equal right to both genders, then girls will motivate to learn other difficult subjects and be a nurse, a doctor in future. Secondly, if the authority provides salary by employees’ knowledge, then students choose subjects by their interest, and girls take science and boys take arts by their curiosity. For instance, the USA government provide money by people knowledge, therefore people of the USA choose both the subject by their interest. To conclude, this situation is happened because of societies mindset and high salaries, which will solve by providing equality to both genders and paid by employees knowledge.
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boys
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select
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science
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subjects
, while
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choose arts
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subjects
. This essay will give the reasons behind this situation and
also
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possible solutions, which
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of things which creates this phenomenon.
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and foremost, the mindset of culture, they
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think
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girls
become housewives in the future,
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girls
have not required to learn
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hard
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subjects
like
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science
.
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,
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boys
have the responsibility for earning in the future, and
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sciences
provide a high salary as compared to another field.
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, in India, all high paid jobs belong to
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science
streams such as doctors, engineers, and
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more. These are the main reason for those inequalities in selecting subjects.

On the other hand
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change
these scenarios.
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government
gives equal right to both genders, then
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girls
will motivate to learn other difficult
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subjects
and be a nurse, a doctor
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in future
.
Secondly
, if the authority provides salary by employees’ knowledge, then students choose
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subjects
by their interest, and
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girls
take
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science
and
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boys
take arts by their curiosity.
For instance
, the USA
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government
provide money by
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people
knowledge,
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people
of the USA choose both the
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subject
by their interest.

To conclude
, this situation
is happened
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because
of societies mindset and high salaries, which will solve by providing equality to both genders and paid by
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employees
knowledge.
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IELTS essay In this present era, all students went to schools and universities, but there is one difference between the boys and girls field.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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