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In this day and age, the news is getting more and more prevalent in our modern society, particularly online news.

In this day and age, the news is getting more and more prevalent in our modern society, particularly online news. WnXba
In this day and age, the news is getting more and more prevalent in our modern society, particularly online news. Some people assume that this development would bring advantageous influences to people’s daily life. Others argue that this advancement will ruin traditional newspapers and have some adverse impacts. From my perspective, I opine that the advantages of this development definitely overwhelm the drawbacks. On the first hand, reading news through the internet would bring a plethora of beneficial advantages. Firstly, people can easily keep pace with a bunch of information on the internet thanks to frequent updating of the internet. For example, one could search for news through plenty of renowned platforms, which are Google, BBC, and NBC News, and the information will be appeared immediately for the one. As a result, online news is literally ubiquitous on the internet, and these pieces of information will be found easily by intelligently technological devices, such as computers, smartphones, and tablets. On the second hand, online news is a method, which could reduce the risk of deforestation. The crucial reason why I say this is that the traditional newspapers are made by trees, which currently play a key role in providing oxygen for the earth. For instance, if an individual used the internet to read the news, he would make a great contribution to the environment because after finishing the newspapers, a lot of people tend to throw it away instead of retaining it. Thus, this will increase wasted material dramatically out of the environment. Moreover, the percentage of oxygen would be fallen tremendously if people continued using newspapers. Last but not least, people could receive precise news through a variety of prestigious online news websites or even social media platforms, which are Twitter, Instagram, and Facebook. In other words, although the newspapers industry selects deliberately information to update people, a huge number of people still prefer to reading online news to reading traditional newspapers because thanks to the development of technological advancement, there are many applications, which could detect fake news immediately, and due to that people fully trust in reading online news. Consequently, fake news will be surely disappeared and people do not have to be conscious of it. In conclusion, even though this trend has disadvantages, I strongly believe that the benefits completely outperformed the drawbacks.
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Some
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assume that this development would bring advantageous influences to
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people’s
daily life. Others argue that this advancement will ruin traditional
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newspapers
and have
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some
adverse impacts. From my perspective, I opine that the advantages of this development definitely overwhelm the drawbacks.

On the
first
hand,
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reading
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news
through the internet would bring a plethora of beneficial advantages.
Firstly
,
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people
can
easily
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keep
pace with a bunch of
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information
on the internet thanks to frequent updating of the internet.
For example
, one could search for
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news
through
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plenty
of renowned platforms, which are Google, BBC, and NBC
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, and the
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information
will
be appeared
immediately for the one.
As a result
,
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online
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news
is
literally
ubiquitous on the internet, and these pieces of
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information
will
be found
easily
by
intelligently
technological devices, such as computers, smartphones, and tablets.

On the second hand,
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online
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news
is a method, which could
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reduce
the
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risk
of deforestation. The crucial reason why I say this is that the traditional
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newspapers
are made
by trees, which
currently
play a key role in providing oxygen for the earth.
For instance
, if an individual
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used
the internet to read the
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news
, he would
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make
a great contribution to the environment
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because
after finishing the
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newspapers
,
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a lot of
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people
tend to throw it away
instead
of retaining it.
Thus
, this will increase wasted material
dramatically
out of the environment.
Moreover
, the percentage of oxygen would
be fallen
tremendously
if
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people
continued using newspapers.

Last
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not least,
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people
could receive precise
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news
through a variety of prestigious
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online
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news
websites or even social media platforms, which are Twitter, Instagram, and Facebook.
In other words
, although the
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newspapers
industry selects
deliberately
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information
to update
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people
, a huge number of
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people
still
prefer to
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to
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traditional
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newspapers
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because
thanks to the development of technological advancement, there are
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many
applications, which could detect fake
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news
immediately, and due to that
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people
fully
trust in
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reading
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online
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.
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, fake
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will be
surely
disappeared and
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people
do not
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have to
be conscious of it.

In conclusion
,
even though
this trend has disadvantages, I
strongly
believe that the benefits completely outperformed the drawbacks.
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IELTS essay In this day and age, the news is getting more and more prevalent in our modern society, particularly online news.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
387 words
6.5
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