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In this contemporary socity, the development of the economy makes people busier than before.

In this contemporary socity, the development of the economy makes people busier than before. Under such cricumstances, some people believe that they are supposed to call that person directly is better, because it can save more time in their own bussiness. However, from my prespective, I prefer to send emails and text messages. To begin with, due to the controversial or upestting topic can transmit sorrow and negative emotion. We need to use emails and messages to convey information. When we type something that we want to express in our mind, we must think twice. But if we speak on the phone or face to face, we are more likely to blurt out it what we are thinking. It will cause trouble between us. Thereby, using the emails or messages can reduce the risk of arguments. Last year, I have applied a position in a high-tech company. Fininshed the interview, all of the job seekers were required to waiting for the result at home until next week. After a week, I received an email that I was refused to get this job. During reading the email, I gradually understood the reason that why I missed this job. In this case, using text message enable both people to calm down in their mood. Besides, I think the emails and messages can provide the evidence if someone does not admit or forget what he said in the future. In some controversal occasion like negotiation or the businesses, some people will agree with your conditions or price at first, but the next day, they won’t admit what he said last night because he was drunk and he does not remember anything. There’s nothing we can do since we don’t have any records or something which can prove what he said. While, if we use the message or the email on the negitiations and discussions, we will have the evidence and he can’t deny what he has promised. Like last month, our company let me talk to a client with business. On account of the epidemic, we just use the email to discuss the project. We had a good conversation on the internet, but in the other day, he denied the consequence we had talked over. So I used our previous email to ask him not to breaking the argeement betweenus in such way. To sum up, considering these problems, we can realize using the emails and text messages which bring more benefits as much as possible.
In this contemporary
socity
, the development of the economy
makes
people
busier than
before
. Under such
cricumstances
,
some
people
believe that they
are supposed
to call that person
directly
is better,
because
it can save more time in their
own
bussiness
.
However
, from my
prespective
, I prefer to
send
emails and text messages.

To
begin
with, due to the controversial or
upestting
topic can transmit sorrow and
negative
emotion. We need to
use
emails and
messages
to convey information. When we type something that we want to express in our mind, we
must
think
twice.
But
if we speak on the phone or face to face, we are more likely to blurt out it what we are thinking. It will cause trouble between us. Thereby, using the emails or
messages
can
reduce
the
risk
of arguments. Last year, I have applied a position in a high-tech
company
.
Fininshed
the interview,
all of the
job seekers
were required
to waiting for the result at home until
next
week. After a week, I received an email that I
was refused
to
get
this job. During reading the email, I
gradually
understood the reason that why I missed this job.
In this case
, using text
message
enable both
people
to calm down in their mood.

Besides
, I
think
the emails and
messages
can provide the evidence if someone does not admit or forget what he said in the future. In
some
controversal
occasion like negotiation or the businesses,
some
people
will
agree
with your conditions or price at
first
,
but
the
next
day, they won’t admit what he said last night
because
he was
drunk and
he does not remember anything. There’s nothing we can do since we don’t have any records or something which can prove what he said. While, if we
use
the
message
or the email on the
negitiations
and discussions, we will have the
evidence and
he can’t deny what he has promised. Like last month, our
company
let
me talk to a client with business. On account of the epidemic, we
just
use
the email to discuss the project. We had a
good
conversation on the internet,
but
in the other day, he denied the consequence we had talked over.
So
I
used
our previous email to ask him not to
breaking
the
argeement
betweenus
in such way.

To sum up, considering these problems, we can realize using the emails and text
messages
which bring more benefits as much as possible.
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IELTS essay In this contemporary socity, the development of the economy makes people busier than before.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
5.5
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