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In this contemporary era, media is flooded with advertisements, striking to grab the attention of customers.

In this contemporary era, media is flooded with advertisements, striking to grab the attention of customers. Some people believe that advertising is very successful at motivating consumers to buy things, whereas others opine that advertisements are common in these days folks wont pay attention to it. This essay will look at the both sides of the argument and draw a reasonable conclusion. On the one hand, few people say that nowadays, advertising is extremely successful at encouraging customers to purchase their products. Many advertising companies are giving contracts to famous celebrities to advertise their products. Moreover, advertising firms are paying a lot of money to them. In this period, people are sticking to their televisions, cell phones and they are watching different types of adds. They came to know about product details. For instance, a famous celebrity will come in television for advertising Smartphone’s, people will look at that and plan to buy the product. In addition, in this case there are some disadvantages. People are blindly believing the celebrities adds and procuring the product and even they are not checking product specifications. So masses are wasting a lot of money. On the other hand, some masses think that advertising is very common In this stage. Technology is practically taken our lives, people are using youtube, Facebook, gmail etc everyday we are getting thousands of advertisements from these tools. We are avoiding these, why because, It consumes our precious time and money, it turns our mind to buy that product. Advertisements are not only about products and also it includes hospitals, restaurants etc. Furthermore, some people think that these are very common advertisements. To sum up, advertising is extremely successful to encourage consumers. However, people try to ignore unnecessary advertisements.
In this contemporary era, media
is flooded
with
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advertisements
, striking to grab the attention of customers.
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Some
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people
believe that advertising is
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very
successful at motivating consumers to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
things, whereas others opine that
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advertisements
are common in these days folks
Please make sure you mean ‘wont’ (a habit), not “won’t”/“won’t” (short for ‘will not’)?
wont
pay attention to it. This essay will look at the both sides of the argument and draw a reasonable conclusion.

On the one hand, few
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people
say that nowadays, advertising is
extremely
successful at encouraging customers to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
their
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products
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
advertising
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
are giving contracts to
Consider using “celebrities”.
famous celebrities
to advertise their
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products
.
Moreover
, advertising firms are paying
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
money to them. In this period,
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people
are sticking to their televisions, cell
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
phones and
they are watching
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different
types of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
adds
. They came to know about
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product
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
.
For instance
, a
Consider using “celebrity”.
famous celebrity
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
in television for advertising Smartphone’s,
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people
will look at that and plan to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
the
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product
.
In addition
,
in this case
there are
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some
disadvantages.
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People
are
blindly
believing the celebrities
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
adds
and procuring the
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product
and even they are not checking
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product
specifications.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
masses are wasting
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a lot of
money.

On the other hand
,
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some
masses
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that advertising is
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very
common In this stage. Technology is
practically
taken our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
,
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people
are using
The official name of this popular video platform is spelled with a capital “T”.
youtube
, Facebook,
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gmail
etc everyday we are getting thousands of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
from these tools. We are avoiding these, why
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
, It consumes our precious time and money, it turns our mind to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
that
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product
.
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Advertisements
are not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
about
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products
and
also
it includes hospitals, restaurants etc.
Furthermore
,
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some
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that these are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
common advertisements.

To sum up, advertising is
extremely
successful to encourage consumers.
However
,
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people
try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
unnecessary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
.

IELTS essay In this contemporary era, media is flooded with advertisements, striking to grab the attention of customers.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
5.0
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