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In this competitive world, the state of true happiness has become really difficult to achieve.

In this competitive world, the state of true happiness has become really difficult to achieve. 5geB
In this competitive world, the state of true happiness has become really difficult to achieve. Happiness has a different meaning for different people. In my opinion, some people struggle a lot to achieve happiness, whereas others are chronically happy, irrespective of the situation. This essay will explore why it is difficult to define happiness and what are the different factors influencing happiness. As we know, different people have different levels of needs. These unsatisfied needs further stimulate an individual to act in order to satisfy them. Once the needs of a specific level are satisfied, an individual starts aspiring to move on to the next level needs. Fulfilment of needs leads to satisfaction which further provides happiness to a person. Therefore, we can say that happiness is a by-product of satisfaction. Since people perceive happiness differently; they find it difficult to quantify happiness. Moreover, happiness is nothing but a state of mind. For example, a highly affluent person may not be contented with what he has; on the contrary, a poor person can be happy while struggling for a day’s meal. Similarly, there are various determiners of happiness. The first and foremost is a feeling of content. A person who has a feeling of a positive sense of discontent always remains happy. In other words, such a person is happy with his work and life but still aspires for more and more to learn and to achieve. The other factor is the locus of control or the key to happiness. A person is either controlled by the external factors, or he is capable of controlling them. As a result, his happiness is decided by the other people or things, not by his own mind. If people are able to control their minds, then they can control their own happiness, no matter what the circumstances are. To conclude, happiness depends on our attitudes and perceptions. As far as we have the keys to happiness in our hands, nothing external in this world can affect the level of our happiness and satisfaction.
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. In my opinion,
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struggle a lot to achieve
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, whereas others are
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happy
, irrespective of the situation. This essay will explore why it is difficult to define
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happiness
and what are the
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different
factors influencing happiness.

As we know,
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different
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people
have
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different
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levels
of
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needs
. These unsatisfied
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needs
further
stimulate an individual to act in order to satisfy them. Once the
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needs
of a specific
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level
are satisfied
, an individual
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starts
aspiring to
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on to the
next
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level
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needs
.
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Fulfilment
of
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leads to satisfaction which
further
provides
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to a
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person
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, we can say that
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is a by-product of satisfaction. Since
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people
perceive
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differently
; they find it difficult to quantify
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Moreover
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is nothing
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a state of mind.
For example
, a
highly
affluent
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person
may not
be contented
with what he has;
on the contrary
, a poor
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person
can be
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happy
while struggling for a day’s meal.

Similarly
, there are various determiners of
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happiness
. The
first
and foremost is a feeling of content. A
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person
who has a feeling of a
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positive
sense of discontent always remains
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happy
. In
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words, such a
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person
is
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happy
with his work and life
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but
still
aspires for more and more to learn and to achieve. The
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other
factor is the locus of control or the key to
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happiness
. A
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person
is either controlled by the external factors, or he is capable of controlling them.
As a result
, his
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happiness
is decided
by the
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other
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people
or things, not by his
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own
mind. If
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people
are able to control their minds, then they can control their
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own
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happiness
, no matter what the circumstances are.

To conclude
,
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depends on our attitudes and perceptions. As far as we have the keys to
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happiness
in our hands, nothing external in this world can affect the
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level
of our
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happiness
and satisfaction.
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IELTS essay In this competitive world, the state of true happiness has become really difficult to achieve.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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