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In these set of materials, the reading states that the Quakers -which are odd noises that lasted under water in the Atlantic Ocean near Russia, from 1960s-1980s- can be explained by three theories.

In these set of materials, the reading states that the Quakers -which are odd noises that lasted under water in the Atlantic Ocean near Russia, from 1960s-1980s- can be explained by three theories. PVXdw
In these set of materials, the reading states that the Quakers -which are odd noises that lasted under water in the Atlantic Ocean near Russia, from 1960s-1980s- can be explained by three theories. However, the professor states that no one can be sure about Quakers sound’s origin. , She opposes each theory. First, the reading claims that the strange noises were actually the calls of male and female of orca whales during a courtship ritual. The professor says that this theory seems plausible at first, but it is ultimately unlikely. The whales live close to the surface, and submarines can’t hear its noise since they are located deep in the ocean. In addition, orca whales can easily be detected by Russian sonar if they are nearby. Second, the reading claims that the sound were caused by the giant squid. Conversely, the professor opposes this theory because the odd sounds were heard between 1960-1980 while squid lived there before these sounds started and after they stopped. Therefore, there is no reason to start here the noises at 1960 suddenly and also stop hearing it at 1980 suddenly too. Third, the reading suggests that these sounds were related to another country’s submarines that were secretly patrolling the area. The professor refutes this this theory as well. She says that the sources of the sounds seems to move around and change direction very quickly. And a technology to build submarines with such a speed and a silent engine is not available even today.
In these set of materials, the
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reading
states that the Quakers -which are odd
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noises
that lasted under water in the Atlantic Ocean near Russia, from 1960s-1980s- can be
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explained
by three
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theories
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However
, the
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professor
states that no one can be sure about Quakers
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sound’s
origin.
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,
She opposes each theory.

First
, the
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reading
claims that the strange
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noises
were actually the calls of male and female of orca whales during a courtship ritual. The
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professor
says that this
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theory
seems plausible at
first
,
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but
it is
ultimately
unlikely. The whales
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live
close to the surface, and submarines can’t hear its
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noise
since they
are located
deep in the ocean.
In addition
, orca whales can
easily
be detected
by Russian sonar if they are nearby.

Second, the
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claims that the
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sound
were caused
by the giant squid.
Conversely
, the
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professor
opposes this
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theory
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because
the odd
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sounds
were heard
between 1960-1980 while squid
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lived
there
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started
and after they
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stopped
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, there is no reason to
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start
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noises
at 1960
suddenly
and
also
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stop
hearing it at 1980
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too.

Third, the
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reading
suggests that these
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sounds
were related
to another country’s submarines that were
secretly
patrolling the area. The
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professor
refutes
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this this
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theory
as well
. She says that the sources of the
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sounds
seems to
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move
around and
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change
direction
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very
quickly
. And a technology to build submarines with such a speed and a silent engine is not available even
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today
.
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IELTS essay In these set of materials, the reading states that the Quakers -which are odd noises that lasted under water in the Atlantic Ocean near Russia, from 1960s-1980s- can be explained by three theories.

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4 paragraphs
250 words
6.0
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