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In the past, museums stored information related to history and culture. However, nowadays, all this information can be found on the internet and hence, there is no need of museums. Do you agree or disagree

In the past, museums stored information related to history and culture. However, nowadays, all this information can be found on the internet and hence, there is no need of museums. rByo
The significance of museums in today's world is a question of debate as in these days, any kind of information can be obtained from the internet regarding history and culture. While internet plays a substantial role in providing knowledge about anything, I firmly believe that museums will always be irreplaceable and be an important part of the society. On the one hand, number of websites are present which provide relevant information about history and culture of any kind of civilisation. Apart from this, images of sculptures and various artefacts are easily accessible for everyone. Take Wikipedia to illustrate, anything can be searched easily on it to know about culture of any particular country. Consequently, many individuals hold a viewpoint that visiting museums is a sheer wastage of time and money also. Thus, they do not find visiting these places interesting. On the other hand, I would say that museums always hold an important ground and can never be replaced through internet. The first and foremost reason behind this is that museums are a place to preserve the history and heritage of any country. Without these buildings, it would be almost near to impossible to inculcate the importance of culture to future generation. Apart from this, museums also contribute alot in rising the economy. In other words, the money collected from the tourists as fees can be utilised in improving the infrastructure of a nation. For instance, last year, approximately 100000 dollars were received as an entry fees at THE LONDON HERITAGE MUSEUM which was later on used to consrtuct new roads in that area. Finally, many times information is not relevant on the several websites which is not good for people. For example, it was published on a website that the remains of dinosaur in PUSHPA GUJRAL SCIENCE CITY were 5000 years old, whereas in reality, those were only 500 years old. In this way, wrong information was passed to the public. Due to aforementioned reasons, it is completely justified to say that museums do not have any subsitute. Having both sides considered, although the importance of museums has diminished upto a extent, I still believe that museums play an imperative role in the society as it is a good place to preserve the heritage. Moreover, these buildings are an add on for the economy also and it is good to visit instead of finding on internet as sometimes, false information is publised on internet.
The significance of
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museums
in
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today
's world is a question of debate as in these days, any kind of
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information
can
be obtained
from the internet regarding history and
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culture
. While internet plays a substantial role in providing knowledge about anything, I
firmly
believe that
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museums
will always be irreplaceable and be an
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important
part of the society.

On the one hand, number of websites are present which provide relevant
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information
about history and
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culture
of any kind of
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civilisation
. Apart from this, images of sculptures and various
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artefacts
are
easily
accessible for everyone. Take Wikipedia to illustrate, anything can
be searched
easily
on it to know about
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culture
of any particular country.
Consequently
,
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many
individuals hold a viewpoint that visiting
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museums
is a sheer wastage of time and money
also
.
Thus
, they do not find visiting these places interesting.

On the other hand
, I would say that
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museums
always hold an
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important
ground and can never
be replaced
through internet. The
first
and foremost reason behind this is that
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museums
are a place to preserve the history and heritage of any country. Without these buildings, it would be almost near to impossible to inculcate the importance of
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culture
to future generation. Apart from this,
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museums
also
contribute
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alot
in rising the economy.
In other words
, the money collected from the tourists as fees can be
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utilised
in improving the infrastructure of a nation.
For instance
, last year, approximately 100000 dollars
were received
as an entry fees at THE LONDON HERITAGE
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MUSEUM
which was later on
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used
to
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consrtuct
new roads in that area.
Finally
,
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many
times
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information
is not relevant on the several websites which is not
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good
for
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people
.
For example
, it
was published
on a website that the remains of dinosaur in
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PUSHPA
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GUJRAL
SCIENCE CITY were 5000 years
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old
, whereas in reality, those were
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only
500 years
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old
. In this way,
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wrong
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information
was passed
to the public. Due to aforementioned reasons, it is completely justified to say that
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museums
do not have any
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subsitute
.

Having both sides considered, although the importance of
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museums
has diminished
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upto
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a
extent, I
still
believe that
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museums
play an imperative role in the society as it is a
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good
place to preserve the heritage.
Moreover
, these buildings are an
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add on
for the economy
also
and it is
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good
to visit
instead
of finding on internet as
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sometimes
, false
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information
is
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publised
on internet.
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IELTS essay In the past, museums stored information related to history and culture. However, nowadays, all this information can be found on the internet and hence, there is no need of museums.

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