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In the past, most people use to travel to their works. With increase use of computer, internet and smart phones more and more people are starting work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

In the past, most people use to travel to their works. With increase use of computer, internet and smart phones more and more people are starting work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? KeVR
In current era, modern technology is indeed a blessing to the mankind. It has facilitated human life in easy ways. In past era, people commute to their works, but with development in computer, internet and smart phones large numbers of individuals beginning work from home. This essay will discuss merits and demerits of this scenario. Putting light on advantages of work from home with modern electronic gadgets. First and foremost is it saves people time and money which is wasted during commuting from home to work by public or private transportation system and consume valuable time. Other benefit is employees have more time to spend with their family and take care their older one. Also work with computer and internet can give them flexible time for doing their works and reduce their physical and mental stress. Moreover, it is beneficial to companies such as, they save money by not required more space for works and save other expensive like, save electricity and not need other staffs. However, there are some disadvantages of this development. Firstly, work with computer and other digital gadgets from home is not available for all kind of employees such as, persons work in the field work and going to outside of office for meet new people. Furthermore, employers cannot monitor and evaluate their staffs and their works, also employees should not get other benefits like, leaves and incentive. In addition, work on computer for long time can effect on human health such as, eyes vision problem, back pain and muscles stress problem. In conclusion, it can be said that work with electronic devices only useful for special workforces and save time and money of employees as well as the organization. Although it is great opportunity to work from home, field work related workers need to go their workplace. To add, this development impact on individuals job preformation, such as less leaves and no closely monitoring of works.
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current
era, modern technology is
indeed
a blessing to the mankind. It has facilitated human life in easy ways. In past era,
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people
commute to their works,
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but
with development in computer, internet and smart phones large numbers of individuals beginning
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work
from home. This essay will discuss merits and demerits of this scenario.

Putting light on advantages of
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work
from home with modern electronic gadgets.
First
and foremost is it
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saves
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people
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time
and money which
is wasted
during commuting from home to
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work
by public or private transportation system and consume valuable
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time
.
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Other
benefit is
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employees
have more
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time
to spend with their family and take care their older one.
Also
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work
with computer and internet can give them flexible
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time
for doing their works and
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reduce
their physical and mental
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stress
.
Moreover
, it is beneficial to
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companies
such as, they
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save
money by not required more space for works and
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save
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other
expensive like,
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save
electricity and not need
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other
staffs.

However
, there are
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some
disadvantages of this development.
Firstly
,
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work
with computer and
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other
digital gadgets from home is not available for all kind of
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employees
such as, persons
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work
in the field
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work
and
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going to outside
of office for
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meet
new
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people
.
Furthermore
, employers cannot monitor and evaluate their staffs and their works,
also
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employees
should not
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get
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other
benefits like,
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leaves
and incentive.
In addition
,
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work
on computer for long
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time
can effect on human health such as, eyes vision problem, back pain and muscles
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stress
problem.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that
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work
with electronic devices
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only
useful for special
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workforces
and
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save
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time
and money of
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employees
as well
as the organization. Although it is great opportunity to
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work
from home, field
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work
related workers need to go their workplace. To
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add
, this development impact on individuals job
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preformation
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less
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leaves
and no
closely
monitoring of works.
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IELTS essay In the past, most people use to travel to their works. With increase use of computer, internet and smart phones more and more people are starting work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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321 words
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