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In the past many male leaders have led our society to conflicts and violence

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In the past numerous male leader have lead our society to conflict and violence. The world would be better governed and more peaceful if it was ruled by women. According to my perspective I believe that life could have been much better if the world was controlled by female. I partially agree with this statement I will discuss both view of point in the forthcoming paragraph. To commence with, there are various factor to support my point that is why I think nowadays, women are more qualified as compared to men that time they have more knowledge about rule and regulation. To elaborate it, life could have been much better if the world was controlled by female due to this the fact they have more qualities like like leadership and cooperation. It is a good thing. Women have great sense of responsibility and they are MultiTasker have capability to handle conflict. For instance can be seen in the various article of time of India which showed that Indira Gandhi is a intelligent and good leader in the nation. she is a MultiTasker and capability to handle conflict. On the other hand, there are multivariate reason why I think it contemporary period, Male chosen to be a leader due to the fact they are more calm and healthier than women. Female are too sensitive and emotional emotional to give serious disease. In some critical situation man make decision easily due to the fact they are not sensitive and emotional. For example Justin trudeau Prime Minister of Canada. He won three time of election due to the fact he is not sensitive and emotional. He make decision easily. According to my opinion, they are a plethora reason I think nowadays, the world was controlled by women because they have and good good leader in the nation. In conclusion, nowadays, I think women can also become a good leader due to their good quality.
In the past numerous male
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have lead our society to conflict and violence. The
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world
would be better governed and more peaceful if it
was ruled
by
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women
. According to my perspective I believe that life could have been much better if the
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world
was controlled
by female. I
partially
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agree
with this statement I will discuss both view of point in the forthcoming paragraph.

To commence with, there are various
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factor
to support my point
that is
why I
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think
nowadays,
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women
are more qualified as compared to
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men
that time they have more knowledge about
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rule
and regulation. To elaborate it, life could have been much better if the
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world
was controlled
by female
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due
to this the
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fact
they have more qualities
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like like
leadership and cooperation. It is a
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good
thing.
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Women
have great sense of
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responsibility and
they are
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have capability to handle conflict.
For instance
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seen
in the various article of time of India which
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showed
that Indira Gandhi is
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a
intelligent and
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good
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leader
in the nation.
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she
is a
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MultiTasker
and capability to handle conflict.

On the other hand
, there are multivariate reason why I
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think
it contemporary period, Male chosen to be a
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leader
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due
to the
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fact
they are more calm and healthier than
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women
. Female are too sensitive and
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emotional
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emotional
to give serious disease. In
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some
critical situation
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man
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make
decision
easily
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due
to the
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fact
they are not sensitive and
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emotional
.
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Justin trudeau
Prime Minister of Canada. He won three time of election
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due
to the
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fact
he is not sensitive and
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emotional
. He
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make
decision
easily
.

According to my opinion, they are a plethora reason I
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think
nowadays, the
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world
was controlled
by
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women
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because
they have and
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good
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good
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leader
in the nation.

In conclusion
, nowadays, I
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women
can
also
become a
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due
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good
quality.
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IELTS essay In the past many male leaders have led our society to conflicts and violence

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
321 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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