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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work, and communicate online without any face-to-face contact with other people. Is this a positive or negative development?  

In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work, and communicate online without any face-to-face contact with other people. Is this a positive or negative development? mOpK
Nowadays, the advancement in technology have has brought the revolution in many areas such as shopping, working from remote locations, and communicating with people online without any face-to-face contact. Physical interaction In my opinion, it has major merits and minor demerits. With the outbreak of pandemic COVID-19 this have has proved to be a blessing in disguised. However, this has a huge impact to on the marketing and sales professional. Undoubtedly, due to surge in digital technology, In the modern world, the online platform have been a great support supporting during the tough times when the entire globe is facing the ramifications of the outbreak of the Corona Virus which was born in China and floated to the rest of the world. Firstly, it has made contact free shopping more popular. To illustrate this point, people can receive their favourite items at their doorstep in no time with just a few clicks, from various sites buy it from online store such as Amazon, Flipkart, Myntra, etc where they can purchase it any commodity from any location of the world. Secondly, communication has become quite easy and convenient due to availability of applications such as Skype and Zoom App that have brought people together where conference can take place are conducted in real time. Finally, people can communicate converse online with any individuals who are residing in any part of the nation. To demonstrate this point, People can communicate through WhatsApp call and messages through with the help of the internet. Although, online facilities have been benefited beneficial to several people but it has its own shortcomings to few industries, especially where face-to-face contact is must to convince the customer. For instance, it is not possible for a car dealer to sell the car online as customer needs to take a test drive to feel the built quality and comfort while driving a car. To conclude, recent technologies have made the impossible task possible with the click of few buttons that have proved to be greatest advantage while there are few areas where still human involvement is required.
Nowadays, the advancement in technology have has brought the revolution in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
areas such as shopping, working from remote locations, and communicating with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
without any face-to-face contact. Physical interaction In my opinion, it has major merits and minor demerits. With the outbreak of pandemic COVID-19
The verb 'have' is plural. Did you mean: "this has"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?
this have
has proved to be a blessing in disguised.
However
, this has a huge impact to on the marketing and sales professional.

Undoubtedly
, due to surge in digital technology, In the modern world, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
platform have been a great support supporting during the tough times when the entire globe is facing the ramifications of the outbreak of the
The term "Coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.
Corona Virus
which
was born
in China and floated to the rest of the world.
Firstly
, it has made contact free shopping more popular. To illustrate this point,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can receive their
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
items at their doorstep in no time with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
a few clicks, from various sites
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
it from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
store such as Amazon, Flipkart,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Myntra
, etc where they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
it any commodity from any location of the world.
Secondly
, communication has become quite easy and convenient due to availability of applications such as Skype and Zoom App that have brought
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
together where conference can take place
are conducted
in real time.
Finally
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can communicate converse
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
with any individuals who are residing in any part of the nation. To demonstrate this point,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
can communicate through WhatsApp call and messages through with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of the internet.

Although,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
facilities have
been benefited
beneficial to several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it has its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
shortcomings
Did you mean "too"?
to
few industries,
especially
where face-to-face contact is
After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use "must" or "have to" here.
must to
convince the customer.
For instance
, it is not possible for a car dealer to sell the car
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
as customer needs to take a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
drive to feel the built quality and comfort while driving a car.

To conclude
, recent technologies have made the impossible task possible with the click of few buttons that have proved to be
A determiner is probably missing here: "the greatest".
greatest
advantage while there are few areas where
still
human involvement
is required
.
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IELTS essay In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work, and communicate online without any face-to-face contact with other people. Is this a positive or negative development?

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4 paragraphs
347 words
6.0
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