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In the modern era the world has become a small village therefore It is easy to share any kind of information among nations Whilst some people are of the belief that sharing information at scientific and business field is a worthy idea others have a divers v.1

In the modern era the world has become a small village therefore It is easy to share any kind of information among nations Whilst some people are of the belief that sharing information at scientific and business field is a worthy idea others have a divers v. 1
Many people around the world started influencing the eco-system, either directly or indirectly. This influence over the environment is not only leading to bio-diversity, but also some of the species are getting extinct. The main cause of this downfall is, the humans have started occupying animals and birds place and another reason is cutting down trees to a large extent. To overcome this problem, and also to save the world from losing the most valued species, we should implement some of the corrective measures that can be announced by the authority organization. Firstly, The living space of all creatures was occupied by humans. For Example, the construction of chemical industries, large-sized bore wells. Secondly, burning the forest and trees, not only for the purpose of constructing the houses but also to export the trees for business purposes. As a result, the living place of the birds and animals are destroyed or it's been occupied by the humans. This leads to the disappearance of some of the species. For instance, a tortoise, a unique species, is nowhere seen in the world. To overcome, two solutions should be implemented by the ministry as soon as possible. One way is to grow a large number of trees all around our living space, thereby improving the environment. This would save our environment, and also certain species would be revived. Another solution is to stop burning the trees and waste products for one's personal needs. In addition to these solutions, the power should be actively co-operating in implementing these solutions. To conclude, we know some of the measures, that could be taken to prevent or destroying the eco-system of human influence. I hope, that the government would be implementing new rules and regulations soon to stop this downfall.
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people
around the world
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started
influencing the
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eco-system
, either
directly
or
indirectly
. This influence over the environment is not
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only
leading to bio-diversity,
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but
also
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some of the
species are getting extinct. The main cause of this downfall is, the
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humans
have
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started
occupying animals and birds place and another reason is cutting down
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trees
to a large extent. To overcome this problem, and
also
to save the world from losing the most valued species, we should implement
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
corrective measures that can
be announced
by the authority organization.

Firstly
, The living space of all creatures
was occupied
by
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humans
.
For Example
, the construction of chemical industries, large-sized bore wells.
Secondly
, burning the forest and
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trees
, not
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only
for the purpose of constructing the
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houses
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but
also
to export the
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trees
for business purposes.
As a result
, the living place of the birds and animals are
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destroyed
or it's
been occupied
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
humans
. This leads to the disappearance of
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
species.
For instance
, a tortoise, a unique species, is nowhere
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seen
in the world.

To overcome, two solutions should
be implemented
by the ministry as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. One way is to grow
Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use "many" or "numerous"
a large number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
all around our living space, thereby improving the environment. This would save our environment, and
also
certain species would
be revived
. Another solution is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
burning the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
and waste products for one's personal needs.
In addition
to these solutions, the power should be
actively
co-operating in implementing these solutions.

To conclude
, we know
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
measures, that could
be taken
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
or destroying the
Possible spelling mistake found.
eco-system
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
influence. I hope, that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
would be implementing new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
this downfall.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In the modern era the world has become a small village therefore It is easy to share any kind of information among nations Whilst some people are of the belief that sharing information at scientific and business field is a worthy idea others have a divers v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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