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In the last decade, there has been a great increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults. This has been welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, however, other students see these courses as less effective than classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course?

In the last decade, there has been a great increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults. This has been welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, however, other students see these courses as less effective than classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course? yAWd
In the era of globalization and high-tech appliances, students have had huge range of opportunities to make decisions which can alter whole their lives, than it used to be in the past. Moreover, they tend to earn money in order to provide themselves with all kinds of demands. However, it is believed, that this tendency leads to the arising various problems in the life of young individuals, such as shortage of time to do study and being depressed because of the pressure from having loads of responsibilities. The objective of this essay is to examine the main reasons of the problem and offer some possible ways to tackle the issue. It is considered the initial entrance of young generation to the adulthood is the main starting point of the problem. It means that, becoming an adult they take responsibilities for their own lives and behaviors. In addition, penetrating to the new world students have to cope with the all problems, which are occurring in their lives overcoming obstacles and withstanding some difficulties in their paths. For instance, students get to the laborious job in order to pay annual charge for their studies or their aim would be to purchase necessary products or appliances. However, solving the one problem they would be faced with other ones because they will be unprepared to such kinds of challenges as they are amateurs on this sphere. Consequently, they will experience some failures in their paths. Solution for this problem might be the assistance of adults. In other quarters, senior citizens should give some advice and direct young individuals, so they could find their own places in the life. It is assumed, that another crucial cause is the perfectionism and huge desire of the parents to see their children only in high degrees. As an example, recent times most parents require to be very clever, competent, confident, and decisive from young inhabitants. Therefore, in order to meet ideal standards of the successful student young people try to manage their job along with studying hard. As a consequence, it will bring negative consequences to the mental and physical health of young individuals, so fatigue, uncertainty and low self-esteem will appear on them. Apparently, listening to the opinions of the students, define whether they really interested on what they are doing now and giving them much liberty to diversify their lives as they really want could be believed as a solution. To sum up, aforementioned points illustrate that working of students whereas they are exaggerated by their studying might bring some serious problems to the young individual. As far as I am concerned, solutions for this problem could help to minimize hazardous consequences.
In the era of globalization and high-tech appliances,
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students
have had huge range of opportunities to
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make
decisions which can alter whole their
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lives
, than it
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used
to be in the past.
Moreover
, they tend to earn money in order to provide themselves with all kinds of demands.
However
, it
is believed
, that this tendency leads to the arising various
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problems
in the life of
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young
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individuals
, such as shortage of time to do study and
being depressed
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because
of the pressure from having loads of responsibilities. The objective of this essay is to examine the main reasons of the
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problem
and offer
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some
possible ways to tackle the issue.

It
is considered
the initial entrance of
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young
generation to the adulthood is the main starting point of the
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problem
. It means that, becoming an adult they take responsibilities for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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lives
and behaviors.
In addition
, penetrating to the new world
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students
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have to
cope with the all
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problems
, which are occurring in their
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lives
overcoming obstacles and withstanding
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some
difficulties in their paths.
For instance
,
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students
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get
to the laborious job in order to pay annual charge for their studies or their aim would be to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
necessary products or appliances.
However
, solving the one
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problem
they would
be faced
with other ones
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they will
be unprepared
to such kinds of challenges as they are amateurs on this sphere.
Consequently
, they will experience
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
failures in their paths. Solution for this
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problem
might be the assistance of adults. In other quarters, senior citizens should give
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
advice and direct
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young
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individuals
,
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so
they could find their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
places in the life.

It
is assumed
, that another crucial cause is the perfectionism and huge desire of the parents to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
their children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
in high degrees. As an example, recent times most parents require to be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
clever, competent, confident, and decisive from
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young
inhabitants.
Therefore
, in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
ideal standards of the successful
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student
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young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
try to manage their job along with studying
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hard
. As a consequence, it will bring
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negative
The usual preposition to use after "consequences" is not "to". Did you mean "consequences of", "consequences for", or "consequences on"?
consequences to
the mental and physical health of
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young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
fatigue, uncertainty and low self-esteem will appear on them.
Apparently
, listening to the opinions of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
, define whether they
really
interested on what they are doing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
and giving them much liberty to diversify their
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lives
as they
really
want could
be believed
as a solution.

To sum up, aforementioned points illustrate that working of
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students
whereas they
are exaggerated
by their studying might bring
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
serious
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problems
to the
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young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
. As far as I
am concerned
, solutions for this
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problem
could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to minimize hazardous consequences.
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IELTS essay In the last decade, there has been a great increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults. This has been welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, however, other students see these courses as less effective than classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course?

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