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in the future , the main reason for shopping mall will be for entertainment, not to shop

in the future, the main reason for shopping mall will be for entertainment, not to shop E99Kr
In the future, people will go to the shopping mall for entertainment, not just to shop like before and personally, I completely agree with this view. Now most people enjoy shopping online. But it is not convenient and give more time. Because you have to wait for delivery for several days and sometimes goods are not what you want. In spite of these drawbacks, people want to it. So shops which we can do most activities are being organized to recruit people to emporium there. Because the salesmen know that people want to meet with friends and talk about a lot with a cup of coffee. After that, they especially women enjoy shopping. In another way, shops profit a lot. Because they win two sides, customers pay to relax and chain. Nowadays some malls have community to eat, children's play areas and others. The restaurant's foods of there are very cheaper than other restaurants and make faster than other foods. I think the trend will increase. Swimming pool, cinema, gym, dance square, museum and so on will be built in the future. There are some shops which they are not changed. They are only for shopping. Because their place is not large, so there are not places for entertainment. But they have enough customers, enough benefit. I believe that there will be the neighbourhood for entertainment in other shops, but not all. People will go to the emporium to relax and enjoy taking or meeting friends and family, and shopping too.
In the future,
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people
will go to the
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shopping
mall for entertainment, not
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to
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shop
like
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before
and
personally
, I completely
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agree
with this view.
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Now
most
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people
enjoy
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shopping
online.
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But
it is not convenient and give more time.
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Because
you
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have to
wait for delivery for several days and
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sometimes
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goods
are not what you want.
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In spite of
these drawbacks,
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people
want to it.
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So
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shops
which we can do most activities are
being organized
to recruit
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people
to emporium there.
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Because
the salesmen know that
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people
want to
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meet
with friends and talk about a lot with a cup of coffee. After that, they
especially
women enjoy
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shopping
. In another way,
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shops
profit a lot.
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Because
they win two sides, customers pay to relax and chain.

Nowadays
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some
malls have community to eat, children's play areas
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and others
. The restaurant's foods of there are
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very
cheaper than
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other
restaurants and
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make
faster than
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other
foods. I
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think
the trend will increase. Swimming pool, cinema, gym, dance square, museum and
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so
on will
be built
in the future.

There are
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some
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shops
which they are not
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changed
. They are
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only
for
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shopping
.
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Because
their place is not large,
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so
there are not places for entertainment.
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But
they have
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enough
customers,
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enough
benefit.

I believe that there will be the
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neighbourhood
for entertainment in
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other
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shops
,
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but
not all.
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People
will go to the emporium to relax and enjoy taking or meeting friends and family, and
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shopping
too.
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IELTS essay in the future, the main reason for shopping mall will be for entertainment, not to shop

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  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
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