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In the future people go to shopping center for entertainment not to shop

In the future people go to shopping center for entertainment not to shop WGyy5
Is it true that many people prefer to go online shopping while nobody can deny shopping online is ever increasing rececntly. Personally, i completely agree that people will go to shopping centres merely for having fun soon or late in coming years. Firstly, more and more people tend to shopping online. Particularly, this is the time when the epidemic is ragging all around the world. To sum up we have to limit going out. Not only about this reason but also as well as convenience comes from it. Such as, when i need a new phone case but i’m overwhelmed to go out and buy it. I can completely order online and ask them to ship as soon as possible. Secondly, shopping malls offer more and more pleasure activities from having a meal in game centre for children. In addition people enjoy shopping malls with their friend owing to malls have plans for even more entertainment facilities namely cinemas, bowling alleys, restaurents, … In conclusion, for this reason i mentioned above, i strongly believe people will buy their. Items more and more through the web page and soon we writness more friends and families going to shopping center for entertainment.
Is it true that
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many
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people
prefer to go
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online
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shopping
while nobody can deny
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shopping
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online
is
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ever increasing
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rececntly
.
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i
completely
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agree
that
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people
will go to
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shopping
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centres
merely
for having fun
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soon
or late in coming years.

Firstly
, more and more
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people
tend to
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shopping
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online
.
Particularly
, this is the time when the epidemic is ragging all around the world. To sum up we
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have to
limit going out. Not
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only
about this reason
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but
also
as well
as convenience
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comes
from it. Such as, when
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i
need a new phone case
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but
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i’m
overwhelmed to go out and
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buy
it. I can completely order
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online
and ask them to ship as
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soon
as possible.

Secondly
,
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shopping
malls offer more and more pleasure activities from having a meal in game
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centre
for children. In
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addition
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people
enjoy
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shopping
malls with their friend owing to malls have plans for even more entertainment facilities
namely
cinemas, bowling alleys,
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restaurents
, …

In conclusion
,
for this reason
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i
mentioned above,
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i
strongly
believe
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people
will
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buy
their. Items more and more through the web page and
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soon
we
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writness
more friends and families going to
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shopping
center for entertainment.

IELTS essay In the future people go to shopping center for entertainment not to shop

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
200 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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