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In the future it seem it would be difficult to live on Earth some people think more money should be spent researching on other planets to leave such as mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that considering earth's current environment will be impossible to survive on earth after several years, thus more amount of money should be invested on research on planets like mars. This essay will disagree with this view because the cost of the research can be utilised in creating better environment on earth and it will be beneficial for upper class only as lower caste cannot be afford it. The main reason to think about before spending money on such research is that the amount of money can be used to make the earth inhabitat again over consumption of fossil fuels and pollution are the major sources that are leading to the disastrous outcome, Which can be resolved by finding alternative and more natural energy source along with planning to cut down pollution via investing money on such projects. For example, paris is spending millions of Euros to create eco friendly city by planting more trees and using bicycle lanes in an attempt to generate less CO2 emission. If all the countries unite to rebuild the earth's environment then there will be no need for further research on other planets. wealthy people can easily afford to pay for such transition from our planet to another leaving behind poor class to suffer. Society disparity will not unable millions of people to escape from the polluted environment of the earth. For example, elon musk has already started a project called spaceX with the aim to colonize Mars. In this project 19. 3 million people have been registered so far all of them belongs to affluent class while some people starve to death due to lack of money. It is not wise to spend tons of Fortune on such expenses. In conclusion, the unformattable price of the research on other planets for colonization will only benefit to rich people. Thus, money should better used to make the earth sustainable.
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is argued
that considering earth's
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current
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environment
will be impossible to survive on
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earth
after several years,
thus
more amount of
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money
should
be invested
on
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research
on planets like
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mars
. This essay will disagree with this view
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because
the cost of the
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research
can be
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utilised
in creating better
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environment
on
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earth and
it will be beneficial for upper
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class
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only
as lower caste cannot be
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afford
it.

The main reason to
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think
about
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before
spending
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money
on such
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research
is that the amount of
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money
can be
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used
to
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make
the
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earth
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inhabitat
again over consumption of fossil fuels and pollution are the major sources that are leading to the disastrous outcome, Which can
be resolved
by finding alternative and more natural energy source along with planning to
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cut
down pollution via investing
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money
on such projects.
For example
,
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paris
is spending millions of Euros to create
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eco friendly
city by planting more trees and using bicycle lanes in an attempt to generate less CO2 emission. If all the countries unite to rebuild the earth's
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environment
then there will be no need for
further
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research
on other planets.

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wealthy
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people
can
easily
afford to pay for such transition from our planet to another leaving behind poor
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class
to suffer. Society disparity will not unable millions of
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people
to escape from the polluted
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environment
of the
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earth
.
For example
,
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elon musk
has already
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started
a project called
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spaceX
with the aim to colonize Mars. In this project 19. 3 million
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people
have
been registered
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so
far all of them belongs to affluent
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class
while
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some
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people
starve to death due to lack of
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money
. It is not wise to spend tons of Fortune on such expenses.

In conclusion
, the
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unformattable
price of the
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research
on other planets for colonization will
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only
benefit to rich
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people
.
Thus
,
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money
should better
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used
to
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make
the
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earth
sustainable.
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IELTS essay In the future it seem it would be difficult to live on Earth some people think more money should be spent researching on other planets to leave such as mars.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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