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In the contemporary work, the standard of life is improved significantly that lead to people pick up job with the most crucial consideration is the salary.

In the contemporary work, the standard of life is improved significantly that lead to people pick up job with the most crucial consideration is the salary. 2RRqX
In the contemporary work, the standard of life is improved significantly that lead to people pick up job with the most crucial consideration is the salary. From my perspective personally, I disagree with this idea as I will discuss in the following this essay. There are several reasons that make me not suppose to support this idea. Firstly, most people give preference to job satisfaction over the salary. Job satisfaction includes work-life balance, vacation, quality work and many more parameters. It is scientifically proven that job satisfaction adds to well-being and happiness to human lives. For example, a person earning less will be happier than the person earning big bucks but going through extreme stress and pressure at a workplace. Thus, job satisfaction should be considered as an important factor while choosing a job.
In the contemporary work, the standard of life is
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significantly
that lead to
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people
pick up
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job
with the most crucial consideration is the salary. From my perspective
personally
, I disagree with this
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idea
as I will discuss in the following this essay.

There are several reasons that
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make
me not suppose to support this
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idea
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Firstly
, most
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people
give preference to
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job
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satisfaction
over the salary.
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Job
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satisfaction
includes work-life balance, vacation, quality work and
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many
more parameters. It is
scientifically
proven that
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job
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satisfaction
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adds
to well-being and happiness to human
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lives
.
For example
, a person earning less will be happier than the person earning
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big
bucks
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but
going through extreme
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stress
and pressure at a workplace.
Thus
,
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job
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satisfaction
should
be considered
as an
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important
factor while choosing a
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job
.
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IELTS essay In the contemporary work, the standard of life is improved significantly that lead to people pick up job with the most crucial consideration is the salary.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
134 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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