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The widespread use of the Internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems connected with using the web? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from

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In modern life, numerous of people have a high demand in using the Internet. Resorting to the Internet definitely get social life into trouble. My opinion on the matter is surfing the internet frequently can lead to obesity and health issues. To commence, this essay will examine for my opinion and guess the method to deal this problems. First of all, nowadays parents always engross with their bussiness. They use mobile phone to keep tracks of their kids to ensure their safety. Besides, children need to get in touch with their friends and their parents so they are allowed to use the phone. For that, youngster may no have parental monitoring, using internet will be uncontrollable. Apart from this, children easily obsessed with the social media. But not only kids, adults also being addicted to the internet. Focussing excesssively on the scoial media make people do not concentrate on their duet and health. The pucbilc will absolutely get some health problems. . For thoes, who have a good health background may not be get dangerous sick. In contrast, humas being weak, will be suffer from serious health problem. For instance, being gluded to the screen will significantly cause myopic. Moreover, online bullying is obviously happened more and more in social. People, who are bullied will get in a big problems. They become quiet and may have a major depressive disorder. So, how can social handle this serious problem? For children, I am convinced that parents are the keys to help kids from internet problems. Parents should concentrate on their kids’ activities on social media. Additionaly, mums and dads must give laws on the time using mobile phone for their kids to ensure that they do not share most of their time to online the internet. As well as that, adults should manage their using of internet by selfs. Governments and schools have to educate the public the reasonable ways to use social media and simultaneously make people know the harm of internet. In conclusion, internet bring humans so many advanatges without no doubts. Nonetheless, in this globlize social, internet is essential for social life. Therefore, people should find their best own ways to make use of benefit of the internet
In modern life, numerous of
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people
have a high demand in using the Internet. Resorting to the Internet definitely
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get
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social
life into trouble. My opinion on the matter is surfing the internet
frequently
can lead to obesity and
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health
issues. To commence, this essay will examine for my opinion and guess the method to deal
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this
problems.

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First of all
, nowadays
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parents
always engross with their
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bussiness
. They
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use
mobile phone to
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keep
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tracks
of their
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kids
to ensure their safety.
Besides
, children need to
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get
in touch with their friends and their
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parents
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so
they are
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allowed
to
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use
the phone. For that, youngster may no have parental monitoring, using internet will be uncontrollable. Apart from this, children
easily
obsessed with the
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social
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media
.
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But
not
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only
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kids
, adults
also
being addicted
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excesssively
on the
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scoial
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media
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make
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people
do not concentrate on their duet and
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health
. The
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pucbilc
will
absolutely
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get
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some
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health
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problems
.
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.
For
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thoes
, who have a
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good
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health
background may not be
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get
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dangerous
sick.
In contrast
,
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humas
being weak, will be
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suffer
from serious
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health
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problem
.
For instance
, being
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gluded
to the screen will
significantly
cause myopic.
Moreover
, online bullying is
obviously
happened more and more in
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social
.
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People
, who
are bullied
will
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get
in a
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big
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problems
. They become quiet and may have a major depressive disorder.

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So
, how can
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social
handle this serious
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problem
? For children, I
am convinced
that
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parents
are the keys to
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help
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kids
from internet
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problems
.
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Parents
should concentrate on their
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kids’
activities on
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social
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media
.
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Additionaly
,
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mums
and dads
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must
give laws on the time using mobile phone for their
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kids
to ensure that they do not share most of their time to online the internet.
As well
as that, adults should manage their using of internet by
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selfs
.
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Governments
and schools
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have to
educate the public the reasonable ways to
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use
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social
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media
and
simultaneously
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make
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people
know the harm of internet.

In conclusion
, internet bring humans
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so
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many
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advanatges
without no doubts. Nonetheless, in this
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globlize
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social
, internet is essential for
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social
life.
Therefore
,
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people
should find their best
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own
ways to
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make
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use
of benefit of the internet
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IELTS essay The widespread use of the Internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems connected with using the web? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
369 words
6.0
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