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In spite of the advances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry .why is this case .what can be done about this problem.

In spite of the advances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry. why is this case. what can be done about this problem. xmgl9
Undoubtedly technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds in agrarien sector. however many people are encountering the problem of food crisis at the globe. This essay shall juxtapose its various factors as well as possible remadies to curb this issue. When it comes to the causes of this phenonmenon. first and formost is that the growth rate of papulation which has increased significantly whereas, the production of food has comparatively not risen at the same scale. In addition, food is wasted by many people on daily basis which leads to shortage of food for other masses. For instance, restaurants, where food is prepared in bulk, which is not consumed by the consumers. the leftover food is discarded. that is why people go hungry. Furthermore, climate change and geographical conditions such as heavy rainfall, floods and many more aggravates this problem. There are many solutions that can be taken to overcome this issue. firstly, government should make a single child policy to reduce the growth rate of population. Secondly, the wastage of food needs to be reduced. For example, retaurants should cook the foof as per the need of the hour and not cook in advance. Last but not least, developed countries can aid developing nations by sharing thier technology and both rich and poor nations can be invented super seeds and plants which could tackle with undesireable natural conditions. In conclusion, it is true that a significant number of people in the world suffer from food scarcity eventhough, many farming advancements are used by people. According to me, this can be resolved by providing the knowledge and aid to needy people.
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technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds in
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agrarien
sector.
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are encountering the problem of
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crisis at the globe. This essay shall juxtapose its various factors
as well
as possible
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remadies
to curb this issue.
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first
and
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papulation
which has increased
significantly
whereas, the production of
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has
comparatively
not risen at the same scale.
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,
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food
is wasted
by
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many
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people
on daily basis which leads to shortage of
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food
for other masses.
For instance
, restaurants, where
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food
is prepared
in bulk, which is not consumed by the consumers.
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the
leftover
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food
is discarded
.
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that
is why
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people
go hungry.
Furthermore
, climate
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change
and geographical conditions such as heavy rainfall, floods and
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many
more aggravates this problem. There are
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many
solutions that can
be taken
to overcome this issue.
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firstly
,
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government
should
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make
a single child policy to
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reduce
the growth rate of population.
Secondly
, the wastage of
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food
needs to be
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reduced
.
For example
,
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retaurants
should cook the
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foof
as per the need of the hour and not cook in advance. Last
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not least,
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developed countries
can aid developing nations by sharing
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thier
technology and both rich and poor nations can
be invented
super seeds and plants which could tackle with
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undesireable
natural conditions.
In conclusion
, it is true that a significant number of
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people
in the world suffer from
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food
scarcity
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eventhough
,
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many
farming advancements are
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used
by
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people
.
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, this can
be resolved
by providing the knowledge and aid to needy
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people
.
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IELTS essay In spite of the advances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry. why is this case. what can be done about this problem.

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